Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Discussions about coprate at work have long been ongoing among people managed to all competition. It is very interesting topic to discuss in our society as it has many pros and cons. I will use pertinent arguments to explain why the former notions merits attention.

Many of the peoples have not ability they give competition in work, at school and in our daily lifes. After hard months work nothing is more invigorating that an excuration in the natural sight and sounds.After that many of reponsibilities on it and they didn,t managed. Not the life is same for everyone person in the world some are more cautious and some are average in his life.

For example those how individuals their financial condition is excellent in his life they afford all the things and matterial. Then who peoples is financial condition is not better they did not handle the all the problems they managed his house bills and other living resources who need to the paramount of importance for living. From my perspectives my father is a farmer and they tried to every possible things for their family but he is not reached all the needs who need in our life its very difficult to some people to live in crucial homes and wearing expensive clothes.

In the end advantages and disadvantages of coporate like in shool and in goods canot be easy. Considering what was discussed above there is no doubt that competition is outweighs its drawbacks. My final point is that I believe that there are indeed too many benefits to ignore when it comes to good things with cooperate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding competition versus cooperation, but the development of ideas is severely hindered by limited language control. While the writer takes a position that competition outweighs drawbacks, the arguments provided in the body paragraphs are disjointed, difficult to follow, and drift into tangential personal examples about financial struggles and farming rather than fully exploring the prompt's nuances. Key terms like 'coprate' appear to confuse cooperation and competition, making it difficult to determine whether the writer is fully engaging with both views. According to the Band 4 and 5 descriptors, the response is somewhat tangential and ideas remain under-developed and unclear, warranting a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. Paragraphing is attempted, with distinct blocks of text, but the internal structure of each paragraph fails to present a coherent train of thought. Sentences such as 'After hard months work nothing is more invigorating that an excuration in the natural sight and sounds' interrupt the flow entirely. Furthermore, referencing and cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or inaccurate (for example, 'Many of the peoples have not ability they give competition'). There is no clear overall progression of ideas throughout the response. This performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. The writer makes frequent word-choice errors, such as using 'coprate' and 'cooperate' interchangeably or incorrectly, and 'matterial' instead of material. Other phrases like 'crucial homes' or 'natural sight and sounds' demonstrate a weak control of collocation and style. Spelling errors are also present ('excuration' instead of excursion). The range is minimally adequate at best for conveying basic thoughts, but frequent errors strain the reader's understanding and impede communication at times. These features fit the Band 4 criteria, where basic vocabulary and frequent errors limit expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. The text contains a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are almost always faulty and ungrammatical, such as 'those how individuals their financial condition is excellent in his life they afford all the things'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and punctuation ('they didn,t managed'). These errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning in multiple places. This falls squarely within the Band 4 descriptor, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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