Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

competition at work is good for there people because that good reason, for it you competate with friend whemn over friend wins you but your self confidence was builde for there.I play a batmintain with my friend he told me i will win i chellenge him come on how to you win without me

and he told me i am the best player of school.tomorrow i will competition in sports complex too many peoples comes to ther see our competition because of we are loyal that peoples was embrace.how is it possible it and we start the game. and i paly hardly and my is also play hardly annd focusly and the end my friend was lose the match. i am the best player of batmintain in school.

the rather than is too good against with each other second time he pratice hardly and wins against me and i also see to my friend winner an other game like table tennis he again match with in this game and i think he will against me because of competition thats good for other game.first game was loose he think is it insult for her and he play table tennis they need use full potential of there body and he will give revenge with the game of batmintain.

and the end competition is good for there student and workers . competition is gate builde the self confidence and gate step forward there futare in that competition .cometition not against there people they need calmly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss the topic of competition versus cooperation by providing a personal anecdote about playing badminton and table tennis. However, the connection to the prompt is extremely tenuous, and the main tenets of both views are barely explored. The discussion is restricted to a very narrow, informal personal narrative rather than examining the broader implications of competition at work, at school, and in daily life. Furthermore, your own opinion is not clearly stated or maintained. Ideas remain repetitive and heavily under-developed throughout the essay, focusing excessively on minor narrative details rather than addressing the core arguments surrounding the debate.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical overall structure and fails to utilize appropriate paragraphing. The text is divided into three dense blocks that mix different ideas and narrative shifts haphazardly. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or used very inaccurately, resulting in a disjointed reading experience. For instance, transitional phrases like 'the rather than is too good against with each other second time' and 'and the end' make the logical progression nearly impossible to follow. The referencing and pronoun usage are frequently unclear, making it difficult to determine whether the writer is referring to themselves, their friend, or a general participant.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple everyday terms. There are numerous instances of incorrect word choices, inappropriate collocations, and severe spelling errors that frequently impede communication. Examples include words like 'competate', 'batmintain', 'chellenge', 'peoples', 'embrace' (used incorrectly for embarrassed), and 'hardly' (confused with hard). While the writer attempts to use some less common words, the overwhelming frequency of lexical errors and limited control over word formation restrict the score to this band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying primarily on simple sentences strung together with coordinating conjunctions like 'and'. When complex structures are attempted, they are almost entirely faulty and lack structural integrity. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, and run-on sentences are common, such as in the opening paragraph. Errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and word order occur in almost every sentence, significantly distorting meaning and causing severe strain for the reader trying to decode the message.

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