Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Now,many people think that comparing our life with others, it`s a good idea.On the other hand some people don`t agree with this option,because they believe that they should try cooperate more,rather than competition with others.
One of the main reason that , people who compare yourself with others ,they know that how will be their life in the future just to see others life.In other words they have jealous for others improvement while if that people don`t know about their jealous.This means that for your life nobody intersted in.Therefore,they should stop comparing anything in their daily life.
Furthemore,another important point is that always believe yourself no matter what while you have some kind of problems.This is because when you start doing things that you like your motivation increased noticeably in fewer time.As a result, your career or improments will be grow significantly. Therefore,there is not any incomes for your future
In conclusion,it is clear that you can stay better even you think and you will be the person who they dream to become.I believe that people stop doing this competitions with others and instead this, I will be recommend to stay better for their own fullfillings.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob talab qilingan 250 so'zlik minimumga nisbatan atigi 196 so'zni o'z ichiga olgan holda sezilarli darajada qisqa. Bu vazifani bajarishga salbiy ta'sir ko'rsatadi, chunki argumentlar qisqartirilgan va yetarlicha rivojlantirilmagan holda qolgan. Muallif kirish qismida ikkala qarashni ham kiritishga harakat qilgan bo'lsa-da, muhokamada chuqurlik va aniq misollar yetishmaydi. Qolaversa, muallifning o'z fikri biroz tushunarsiz tarzda 'I will be recommend to stay better for their own fullfillings' deb ifodalangan. Javob uzunlik talabiga javob bermagani va vazifa shartini qisman rivojlantirgani sababli, Vazifani bajarish (Task Achievement) bo'yicha 4.0 ballga loyiq ko'rilgan.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
Esse paragraflarga bo'lingan, ammo umumiy tuzilma va mantiqiy ketma-ketlik tez-tez tushunarsiz iboralar hamda yetarli bo'lmagan bog'lovchi vositalar tufayli buzilgan. Masalan, 'Furthemore,another important point is that' va 'Therefore,there is not any incomes for your future' kabi o'tishlar mexanik va noto'g'ri qo'llanilgan. Bog'liqlik ko'pincha noaniq (masalan, 'stop doing this competitions... and instead this'), bu esa o'quvchiga dalillar zanjiriga ergashishni qiyinlashtiradi. Paragraflarga bo'lishga harakat qilingan, biroq ichki izchillik zaif. Ushbu muammolar javobni Qobiliyat va izchillik (Coherence and Cohesion) bo'yicha qat'iy ravishda 4.0 ballga qo'yadi.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Ishlatilgan lug'at juda oddiy, takrorlanuvchi va ko'pincha g'ayritabiiy yoki noto'g'ri. Bunga misollar: 'have jealous for others improvement', 'motivation increased noticeably in fewer time' va 'improments will be grow significantly'. So'z tanlash va birikmalar cheklangan nazoratni ko'rsatadi, shuningdek, so'z yasalishida sezilarli xatolar mavjud (masalan, 'fullfillings'). Lug'at doirasi cheklangan va bu tez-tez takrorlanadigan xatolar o'quvchining tushunishini qiyinlashtiradi, bu esa Leksik boylik (Lexical Resource) uchun 4-darajali tavsiflarga mos keladi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatik nazorat matn davomida zaif. Javob oddiy va asosiy tuzilmalarga tayanadi, murakkab gaplarga urinishlar esa doimiy ravishda yirik xatolarga olib keladi. Jiddiy grammatik noaniqliklarga misollar: 'people who compare yourself with others ,they know that how will be their life', 'always believe yourself no matter what while you have some kind of problems' va 'it is clear that you can stay better even you think'. Tinish belgilari va probel xatolari (masalan, vergul va nuqtalardan keyin bo'sh joylar yo'qligi) ham keng tarqalgan. Xatolarning chastotasi aniqlikka jiddiy ta'sir ko'rsatadi va 4.0 ballni oqlaydi.
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