Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The unparalleled significance of competition or cooperation cannot be refuted that owing to it has close relevance to our life. There are two dimensions of the topic or to be clearer. In todays competition some people say that contention at school, at work and in daily life is crucila While some argue that do cooperate with others is necassary. As far as i concerned that both views has its own significancy however second view is good according to my mindset because they are so many advantages instead of first one.
Before going to dilate the stance, on the one hand people who believe on rivalry it benefits arguably outweigh drawbacks. Inviduals who want comptition in our daily life since it encourages ourself to do work hard and also guide to acheve goals in life. It boost our mind for doing struggle and it also helps in growth development moreover also asisits to become improve in skills and perfomance. For instance, studends may do word hard and and also suffer from troubling for the achevements of great grade and also for the become first in class thats why it is crucial because it motivate yourself. Alternatively, they have also some drawbacks like student who are good in class and in struggling time or those time when one student which is classmate and want few guidness and he do not give for the sake of grades thats the substaincial disadvantage of contention.
On the other hand, those who say about cooperate is good choice because to do cooprate with others is fantastic hobby means your are help others it provides suitable environment when one individual help other make strong them together and it protect from huge stress and damage relationships.Cooperation by contrast, allows people to combine their skills and ideas to achieve a common objective.
For example, student who help other classmate with the help of some knowledge is a kindness thats hy cooperation guided to become a great individual in our living area and furthermore it makes a person successful in workplace with the help of teamwork.
To my view, cooperation should be encouraged more, although healthy competition plays a important role in or life and it also motivates citizens to improve skilss and other abilities. Both are frolic beneficial role in our brightness or our environment.Compeition can increase motivation and encouragmentwhereas cooperation strenghens relationships and help people to accomplish shared goals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the benefits of competition and cooperation, while also presenting a clear overall position favouring cooperation. Ideas are generally relevant, but the development is somewhat hindered by repetitive phrasing and weak support. For instance, the paragraph on competition mentions that it 'encourages ourself to do work hard and also guide to acheve goals', but the elaboration relies heavily on generalisations rather than well-extended examples. The conclusion restates the position clearly. While the reasoning is somewhat limited by surface-level explanations, the response satisfies the requirements of Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, attempting to follow an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is heavily disrupted by poor paragraph structuring, fragmented sentences, and run-on ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Before going to dilate the stance', 'on the one hand', and 'On the other hand' are used, but their mechanical application and frequent grammatical flaws impede smooth reading. Furthermore, referencing is often unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'they' and 'it'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, placing the response at a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level. Band 5 is awarded as there is some overall organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and heavily impacted by frequent spelling mistakes and word-form errors. Words such as 'crucila', 'necassary', 'Inviduals', 'comptition', 'achevements', 'substaincial', 'cooprate', and 'encouragment' appear throughout the text. While the student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'significance', 'substantive', and 'objective', the persistent errors in spelling and collocation ('dilate the stance', 'struggling time') often strain the reader. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors occurring in almost every sentence. There is a very limited range of accurate complex structures, and attempts at complex sentences are almost always faulty (e.g., 'The unparalleled significance of competition or cooperation cannot be refuted that owing to it has close relevance to our life'). Subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect verb forms ('do cooperate', 'does not give'), and punctuation issues are pervasive. Although the basic meaning can usually be deciphered, the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader, placing the performance firmly in Band 4.0.
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