Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Competition play a crucial role in our life. Competition provides good way and instruction about survive in future and present. From my perspective, competition is very necessary and its our thinking style and promote our living style. Both point of view play a crucial role but i agree compettion is a fasinating thing to build our confidence and make us successful person. Competition instructionand guide to us how can we become a good position holder.

On the one hand, competition at work and school level is very crucial because we can easily judge others thinking level and their style of working by competition. Competition make our memeory and mind set very sharp.We easily understand the different way of success. For example, if a worker work in a office and his style of working was good so manager start a competition with others employes of his. During this process manager judge their thinking style and observe their style of attempt. Competition at work level is more benefical because we build good relation during compettion. Moreover, we become confident during competition. Furthermore, good sellery and promotion is awards for workers who win competition at job level.

On the other hand, competition at school level spread a good environment in a institute. Although childern who have less interest in study teacher start competition and they easily participate and become successful.For example, i have low confidence i did not perform good in school system but my teacher help me in this situation. She give me hope i study and start a competition with my friend. After some days in exams i win the competition reason is my teacher who instruct me and guide me.

In other perspective, during competition now days students face alot of trouble. Mostly students who did not win the competition become a phyco pateint and suffred in anxiety and ditroy their health and some students attempt suicide after lose their competition. So competition is neccessary but win lose is life philosophy we should always trying to be cooperate and smoothly tolrate and face every situation.

In conclusion, both factor have their own place in society and students life. Students work hard day and night for win the competition. Its a rue a win and second is lose the competition. winer always got awards and success. Wether other childern destroy their self and decided to get ride from work or study.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the benefits of competition and the need for cooperation, while also providing the author's own opinion. A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and repetitive, with over-generalised examples that lack sufficient depth. For instance, the discussion regarding school children facing extreme anxiety or becoming 'phyco pateint' touches upon the negative aspects of competition, but it is under-developed and lacks sophistication in argumentation. Therefore, the response aligns best with a Band 6.0 descriptor, as all parts are addressed, but the development of ideas lacks thoroughness and precision.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a discernible paragraph structure, separating the introduction, body paragraphs on work and school, alternative perspectives, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. There is a heavy reliance on repetitive sentence starters and basic cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'On the one hand'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'Both point of view play a crucial role but i agree compettion is a fasinating thing...', which lacks smooth transitional flow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical progression between sentences is frequently disrupted by grammatical issues and awkward phrasing, placing it firmly at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and displays noticeable errors. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'fasinating', 'benefical', and 'philosophy', there are severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'compettion', 'sellery', 'childern', 'phyco pateint', 'ditroy', 'winer', and 'ride'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control of word formation and spelling. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas about work and school environments, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands, corresponding to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is very weak. There are frequent, persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('Competition play', 'manager start', 'childern who have... teacher start'), missing articles ('in future and present', 'in a office'), and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and a lack of capitalization on the pronoun 'i'. These numerous errors frequently strain the reader's comprehension and mean that error-free sentences are the exception rather than the majority, placing this performance at a Band 4.0.

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