Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Acording to some people competition in the field of work,study and als in daily life is good thing while on other hand there are also some belivers who think working with cooperation is better then competing with each other.In this eassy i will discuss both sides and also give my opinon.
In today's world everyone is trying to perform better then others in all the fields like study,work and daily life.Most of people think that this fast growimg world will left them behinde if they will not perform better.But working with cooperation can also help an individual to perform well.Sometimes we need to help our peers.Working with cooperation can improve resuts that might working alone cannot do.The technology is getting advanced day by day and becuase of this development the world is coverted into a global village and it is becoming more challenging every day.And with the advancement there is alot of pressure in every field.
Copperation can enhance the results and improve performance with group works,for example if a company has to give a bussines presentation in front of thier clients soo it might provide better results and feedback from thier client if a group of employes presented that instead of a single employ.Working with cooperation helps to solve the problems more easily because there would be more soloutions for the problem.cooperation also improves unity,understanding among the individuals soo they can work togather to achive thier desire goals.
On the other hand,some people believe that competition is better than woorking with cooperation.As I menstioned earlier that the world have become the globle village so,in this global villlage every one is facing a competator not from thier city or country they are facing all across the world.Especially in field of study students have competiton at a high level with the students acorss the world so they have to be able to face them.
In conclusion I will say that working with cooperaton is much better and it can pro
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views regarding competition and cooperation, presenting a position that leans towards cooperation in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion of globalisation is repeated in both body paragraphs without adding substantial new insight. While the student attempts to support ideas with examples such as a company business presentation, the analysis lacks depth and tends to over-generalise. The conclusion is also abruptly cut off, which prevents the final thought from being fully articulated. These limitations place the performance at a Band 5.5, as the task is addressed, but the ideas are not fully developed or extended.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and an incomplete conclusion. However, the logical progression is hindered by the repetitive structure and abrupt transitions between ideas. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often basic or inaccurate, such as 'alots of pressure' and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of proper punctuation, spacing between words, and missing paragraph breaks early on creates a disjointed reading experience. Overall, the organisation demonstrates some structure but lacks clear overall progression and control of cohesive devices, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for discussing work, study, and daily life. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the response, such as 'Acording', 'belivers', 'eassy', 'growimg', 'bussines', 'employes', 'soloutions', 'togather', 'achive', 'meantised', 'competator', 'acorss', and 'cooperaton'. Word choice is also occasionally awkward, such as 'coverted into a global village'. These noticeable errors and frequent misspellings cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and a few repetitive complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in field of study'), incorrect verb forms ('the world have become'), run-on sentences with missing spaces after punctuation marks ('day.And with'), and missing modal verbs or prepositions. Punctuation is particularly weak, with numerous missing spaces after commas and periods. Because of the frequent errors and restricted range of structures which occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, this warrants a Band 5.0.
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