Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Presently , some people consider that many individual think that competition on their work good , other believe that coopration is good reather than competition each other . I would like to confabulate bothj aspects with my own opinion in upcoming paragharph .
to commence with , there are umpteen points can mentioned to shore up my poiunt of view .First and formost, competition at work at school it will motivited as to acheive from others . To elaborate, student can competition at school because they think that higher
marks from others in their life . As a result, they can work hard to acheive more from other . Afterthat, at company to achieve higher sales from other company their is though competitions between company . to demonstrate , compANIES SALES MORE than others they can release their products on the markets and pepole take the produts which is cheaper . So that, this is a though copmetitions to sell there products at resanable prices
On the paradoxical side ,other aspects are aslo there .To inception, cooperate is aslo good . For example, if we cooprate with each other we friendly fast time and cooperate to them . Therefore, we can cooperate each other we can understand bothself then we can share are probelms and solve it by helping each others .
In conclusion, after confabulating both aspects it can be apparently seen that , no doubt, in modern era competition at work at school and in daily life is a good thing. However, i strongly deem that that without competition no one can survive in the though and the busy life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on competition and cooperation and providing a personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes repetitive. For instance, the discussion on school competition simply states that students want 'higher marks from others in their life', which is under-developed. Similarly, the example of company competition lacks clarity due to phrasing issues. The writer's position is discernible, but the overall depth places this performance firmly in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at structure. However, there is a lack of clear progression, and cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as 'to commence with', 'First and formost', and 'On the paradoxical side'. Referencing is often unclear, particularly pronouns like 'they' and 'them', which makes it difficult to follow who is being referred to in sentences like 'if we cooprate with each other we friendly fast time and cooperate to them'. Therefore, Coherence and Cohesion aligns with Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader, such as 'coopration', 'reather', 'confabulate', 'formost', 'motivited', 'acheive', 'though' (for tough), and 'resanable'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and attempts to use less common items—such as 'confabulate'—result in unnatural collocations or inappropriate usage. This demonstrates the characteristics of Band 4 lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writer attempts some complex sentence forms, but they are frequently faulty and contain severe grammatical errors throughout, such as 'many individual think that competition on their work good' and 'there are umpteen points can mentioned to shore up my poiunt of view.' Punctuation and word-order errors are pervasive, and grammatical inaccuracies frequently impede communication, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.
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