Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this concurrent world,it is undoubtedly true that competition at work,at school and in daily life is a good thing.Some people concern that we should try to cooperate more.However,I quibble from them and propund that competition at work,at school and in daily is a good thing.The this essay will further elaborate my reasons for the same my upcoming paragraphs which i will lead to a logical conclusion.
There are adequate evidence of this view which are sustainable the top-notch concrete reason is cooperate more.Another private aspect is competition at work,at school.The rearmost coherent factor to be considerd which cannot be neglated is competition at work,at school.Thus,it is clear that competition at work,at school has certainly undeniably merits i dermits.
What is half full for some,may appear half empty to others.So people in general trend to distinguish that competition at work,at school which does many reasons.To commence with,some people deem that cooperate more.They also uphold to justify if it cooperate more.
I reiterate that there are plenty of strong factors supporting cooperate more.However,contrary cannot be overload either.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, containing only 176 words. This severely limits the candidate's ability to address all parts of the prompt adequately. While the student attempts to state a position ('I quibble from them and propund that competition... is a good thing'), the arguments are extremely repetitive, vague, and lack proper development or concrete examples. Phrases like 'cooperate more' are introduced without context or explanation, making it difficult to discern a fully formed discussion of both views. Consequently, the response falls into the lower bands for Task Achievement due to the under-length penalty and undeveloped ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The overall organisation is heavily compromised. Although paragraphing is attempted, the paragraphs are extremely short and disjointed. The flow of ideas is severely disrupted by repetitive phrases ('competition at work, at school') and nonsensical transitions such as 'The this essay will further elaborate my reasons for the same my upcoming paragraphs which i will lead to a logical conclusion.' Cohesive devices are misused or applied mechanically, creating a text that lacks a clear logical progression and makes it very difficult for the reader to follow the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student attempts to use some advanced or less common words, but these are misused or severely misspelled, such as 'concurrent' instead of 'current', 'quibble from them' instead of 'differ from them', and 'propund' instead of 'propound'. Other phrases like 'dermits' (demerits) and 'neglated' (neglected) demonstrate serious issues with word formation and spelling. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for expressing precise meaning, frequently straining the reader's comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. Punctuation and spacing issues are pervasive throughout the text (e.g., missing spaces after commas: 'work,at school'). Errors in basic sentence structure, verb agreement, and preposition usage are found in almost every sentence, such as 'There are adequate evidence' (singular/plural mismatch) and 'sustainable the top-notch concrete reason' (incorrect word form and syntax). These errors frequently impede communication and obscure the intended meaning.
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