Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued whether certein individuals hold a view that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a positive thing or others belive that we should try to cooperate more, instead of competing against each other is better. The essay will discuss both views and argu that in my opinion we should effort cooperate more, rather than stand against each others because work togather achive organizational tasks with effective and efficiently.
On the one hand, some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing has some advantages. The main reason is that focus on work at school and in daily life are better thing focus on competition to acomplish company goals, school assignments, or quiz perform duties with focus.For example many people in Lahore and other big cities in Pakistan prefer compete each other everywhere in the place at work, is a better thing because of busy life. As a result, they can manage time. For instance, compete the competitor in market and maintain the position in business sector take the ideas from the internet. However, this method has some limititions.
On the other hand, I believe we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other is more beneficial. This is because direct help social. To ilustrate when I was studying at school in Lahore, we did activity togather and it was very helpful. Moreover teacher diciploine. Consquently people can improve the skills significantly. Therefore, cooperate more, instead of competing against each other is clearly better for most people in the long term.
In conclusion, while both methods have merits. I think cooperate more is more productive and effective for overall development.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both competition and cooperation, and it presents a clear personal opinion in favor of cooperation. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing. For instance, the introduction is awkwardly phrased ('It is often argued whether certein individuals hold a view...'), and the supporting arguments in the body paragraphs rely heavily on vague repetition rather than fully extended, logical explanations. Phrases like 'focus on work at school and in daily life are better thing focus on competition' lack clarity and depth. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the ideas are under-developed, aligning best with Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into four distinct paragraphs, attempting an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor referencing, repetitive phrasing, and abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices are often misused or inadequate; for example, the phrase 'To ilustrate' introduces sentences that are grammatically fractured and lack clear logical connection to the preceding claims. Additionally, paragraphing is applied mechanically rather than to guide the reader smoothly through distinct trains of thought. This level of organization and cohesive control corresponds to Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently circling back to words like 'competition', 'cooperate', 'school', and 'life' without showing a strong range of synonyms or sophisticated phrasing. There are notable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'certein', 'belive', 'argu', 'togeather', 'achive', 'efficiently', 'acomplish', 'limititions', 'ilustrate', and 'diciploine'. These inaccuracies sometimes cause confusion or strain for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptor profile where lexical range is limited and noticeable errors occur.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the execution is heavily flawed. There is a high frequency of grammatical errors, including missing verbs, incorrect word forms, and broken clause structures, such as 'Moreover teacher diciploine' and 'Consquently people can improve the skills significantly.' Many complex sentence attempts result in faulty syntax that impedes communication. While the writer demonstrates some awareness of sentence boundaries, the constant grammatical mistakes place this performance securely at Band 5.
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