Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
some people believe that competition at work or at daily life is good thing, while others argue that we should cooperate mor rather than competing against each other ,this essay will discuss both views before explaining whey i believe that competition at work or at daily life is good thing.
on the one hand, supporters of competition at work and daily life helps people development because competition support people to improve their life or their works also competition generated the motivation to the change for example when someone When someone at school takes first place, the others start competing for that spot, and competition is important at the work because competition at the work always makes the workers is gonna be batter therefore competition helps people to grow up in their life.
on the other hand,supporters believe that will should cooperate rather competition because they think competition generated fighting and cooperate makes people toward continuous progress, unlike competition, which creates disparity among them, also cooperate makes life quite and peaceful and people get along with themselves and that helps people to live in good environment for example when people people cooperate at school and at work that it reduce conflict over competition that's why they believe that cooperate batter than competition
in conclusion,both views have their own views r however
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both views regarding competition and cooperation, and the writer provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. The essay is also significantly under the 220-word count provided, falling well short of the 250-word minimum requirement for Task 2, which negatively impacts task achievement. Furthermore, the conclusion is incomplete, abruptly cutting off at "r however". While the main arguments regarding personal development and peaceful environments are introduced, they lack full elaboration and concrete supporting examples due to the brevity and unfinished nature of the response. Therefore, it satisfies the criteria for a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall organization with a clear attempt at a standard introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Run-on sentences are common due to comma splices, such as in the introduction: "...competing against each other ,this essay will discuss...". Paragraphing is attempted, but the conclusion is incomplete. Cohesive devices are very basic and sometimes inaccurate, such as repetitive use of "also" and "for example" without proper subordination or punctuation. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a proper closing statement disrupts the logical progression. This performance aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as "competition," "cooperate," "development," and "conflict." There are noticeable word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as "competition support people," "makes the workers is gonna be batter," and "cooperate makes life quite and peaceful." Spelling errors also appear, such as "whey" instead of "why," "batter" instead of "better," and "quite" instead of "quiet." These lexical limitations and errors cause some difficulty for the reader, although basic communication is generally achieved, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound/complex sentences linked incorrectly with commas. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ("supporters of competition... helps", "competition generate"), incorrect verb forms ("competition support", "will should cooperate"), and missing capitalization and punctuation. The incomplete conclusion further highlights a lack of control over sentence structure. Because frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and complex sentences are consistently faulty, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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