Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Competetion is a myth in people minds because it gives motivation to attend the challenges. Nemerous people think that competition at labor stage, at institute of education and in the daily routine of life is a advantageous object.While other argue that we should try to strugle more, except racing against one another. In my openion both views are having the logical points because some individuals can race to take the task and some cannot compet because they do not have the ability to compet, so they can struggle to achive the challenges.

Firstly, tournaments at occupation, at acdemic institute or in daily life is a benificial objet because competators can eaisly done theor work on time. Furthermore it gives comfertable zone because to reach on the successful point. In additionn individuals can get huge knoweldge by diffreet platform,when they are in competing phase. For instance when some groups get chance to gain their golas, they try to search the solution to solve their task.They seek the worls wide knoweldge, also they can easily spent thier life days with good manners.

Sceondly, Half of the individuals said that, they should try to work hard because they do not want to compet with each other due to some reasons. Moreover they do not have strong stamina to compet, Because race can leads toward stress. In addition it can disturb mental healt because some time people cannot active everytime. They can work hard and achive thier desires without losing their confidence.

To sum up, competition is a benificial indicator to enhance the cognitive abilities or achives good grades at a specific time but we should try to follow those pathways, that can give our desires without distuption our mental health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on competition and cooperation and providing a personal opinion, although the stance could be more consistently sustained. The ideas are relevant, such as motivation, cognitive abilities, and mental health implications, but some points lack full development and suffer from unclear phrasing. For instance, statements like "tournament at occupation, at acdemic institute or in daily life is a benificial objet" attempt to support the viewpoint on competition, but the explanations are somewhat repetitive and lack precise supporting evidence. The overall task response is sufficient for a Band 5.0, as it covers the prompt requirements but remains somewhat limited and under-developed in places.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay has a basic organizational structure with clear paragraphing, including an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is occasionally hindered by abrupt transitions and faulty cohesive devices. For example, the transition "Sceondly, Half of the individuals said that..." is unnatural and mechanical. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the pronoun "it" in sentences like "In addition it can disturb mental healt because some time people cannot active everytime." Cohesive devices are frequently overused, inaccurate, or repetitive. These issues place the response firmly at a Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and contains frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Throughout the text, there are multiple spelling mistakes, such as "Competetion", "Nemerous", "openion", "benificial", "objet", "competators", "comfertable", "knoweldge", "diffreet", "academice", and "achives". While the writer attempts less common vocabulary like "cognitive abilities" and "advantageous object", the inaccurate word choices, such as using "tournament" instead of "competition" or "labor stage" instead of "workplace", indicate a limited range that is minimally adequate. This performance aligns with a Band 4.5 or 5.0 descriptor; a Band 5.0 is awarded as the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response features a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors, incorrect word forms, and punctuation issues throughout the text. Examples include "both views are having the logical points", "some individuals can race to take the task and some cannot compet because they do not have the ability to compet", and "race can leads toward stress." Subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect verb tenses, and missing auxiliary verbs are common. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors closely, though the basic meaning can still be understood.

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