Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this repedly evovelving world, many people think thet competition is very good thing for grwoing in life.But also other people think this is ganreting uneqwalyti.
On the one hand, people who think the competition is very good thing in work or school life becouse it can be push our work and stady skills. And some how its not bad thing for exampal a one compny they have 10 employes and boss geve the task all of them and says who will complet this task frist and take a good result who will get bones or somthing. So many of them motivet and inspiret by this and they all push there self and give maximum eferts. As a result thet work done very quikly and comes out with good result
On the other hand, people who think competition is not good becouse it can be inhence work lode and make dipretion in employes and student. They belive the solution of this kind of thing is cooperate eachother and its much bater then competition. and it also right becouse it can be very good and grate idea to becouse in thet way people could't do dipress naver stress and live life happyly and becouse of that many of people agree with this point.
in conclution
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding competition and cooperation, presenting basic ideas such as how competition motivates employees and how cooperation prevents stress and depression. However, the student has failed to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, containing only 214 words. Consequently, the ideas are severely under-developed and the conclusion is left unfinished. The student does provide a personal opinion, but the overall development remains partial and superficial. Therefore, the task achievement is limited by the lack of sufficient length and depth, aligning with a band 4.5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay attempts to structure the arguments using basic paragraphing and transitional phrases such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'. However, the overall progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending at 'in conclution'. Cohesive devices are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, such as 'becouse it can be push our work and stady skills' and 'And some how its not bad thing'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraphing is incomplete due to the missing concluding sentences. These issues reflect a band 5 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling errors such as 'repedly', 'evovelving', 'thet', 'grwoing', 'ganreting', 'uneqwalyti', 'stady', 'exampal', 'compny', 'employes', 'geve', 'complet', 'frist', 'bones', 'motivet', 'inspiret', 'there' instead of 'their', 'quikly', 'inhence', 'lode', 'dipretion', 'bater', 'grate', 'naver', and 'conclution'. While the writer attempts some less common words like 'cooperation' and 'motivation', the high density of spelling mistakes and lexical limitations strain the reader and restrict the score to a band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatically, the response demonstrates a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently flawed, for example, in sentences like 'who will complet this task frist and take a good result who will get bones or somthing.' There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and sentence construction. Punctuation is also neglected, particularly in the incomplete conclusion. These pervasive errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and reflect a band 4.0 level of grammatical control.
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