Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the past few years, government jobs are highly dedicated for those people who took part in different competitions and have a fresh mind or a punctual man. He works in the company with honesty. Moreover,I am back on my main point teacher can give a task to all students which is available in the class. If the teacher can teach something to the students during the lecture then teacher can ask some questions from students give me a anwser of that question which i have learned in this class.
Furthermore, According to my experience When i am in primary class teacher give a task to all the students and make a group of those students which are really interested to take part in competition.One or more group had taken from our class and same like in other class teacher can make a group of those students which are enjoyable to join in the competition. After that, both teachers can take groups of those classes and give some mind blowing task, asking hard questions, topic wise questions and syllabus related paragraphs.
From my perspective, these activities are better for students becuase in the full day he can study about the related lectures and there is no any free time for the students. This is our responsibility to give some time to the students which he can fresh fresh his mind. I think the competition is better for students because he shows the difference between the students.
In conclusion, playing the games in the free is more good quite then which are study all the day. At first, you can feel better then you can participate on all the games. I gave advice to the teachers you can give some free time to the students and playing some quiz.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address both views on competition and cooperation, but the discussion is extremely fragmented, highly personal, and largely tangential. The writer mentions jobs, schools, and competitions, but the arguments are underdeveloped, repetitive, and difficult to follow. For example, phrases such as 'Moreover, I am back on my main point teacher can give a task to all students' and the lengthy anecdote about primary school classrooms fail to form a coherent, balanced discussion of the prompt. Furthermore, the writer's own opinion is unclear and obscured by confusing phrasing in the conclusion. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised throughout the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of paragraphs lacks logical progression and clear topic sentences. For instance, the transition 'Moreover, I am back on my main point' is clumsy, and pronouns such as 'he' and 'they' are frequently used with ambiguous referents, making it hard to follow who is being discussed. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a disjointed reading experience. There is no clear overall progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion, leading to a band score of 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple everyday terms. The writer relies heavily on rudimentary words like 'good', 'task', 'students', and 'competition'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'fresh mind', 'punctual man', and 'mind blowing task'. Attempts to use more complex vocabulary result in incorrect word choices and phrasing that impede communication, such as 'playing the games in the free is more good quite then which are study all the day.' Therefore, the lexical resource fits the criteria for a band score of 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences are consistently faulty, marred by frequent errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Examples of severe grammatical breakdown include 'In the past few years, government jobs are highly dedicated for those people who took part...' and 'give me a anwser of that question which i have learned'. Punctuation is often erratic, and sentence boundaries are blurred. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, resulting in a band score of 4.0.
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