Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals think that competition at work,at school and in daily life is a good thing.while others citizen argue with that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.This essay will discuss on botj views with my opinion.
On the one hand,some individuals think that competion in each person is good.If you had not a plan you will top that person at work at school and whatever was compition a person compared with to another person that feel a person have a challenges and they give them 100% to a whatever a challenges at work at school and in a daily life .for example my school friend was very poor knowledge in nepali subject he always fail in that subject,in tha final exam few months ago he tell me i will pass the exam with great gpa i will challange you i get more GPA than you and after final exam the result was published and he passed the exam with great GPA.that a point challenging is not wrong if you go to right way.
On the another hand,others citizen believe and agrre that we should to be a cooperate more rathan than compared and competing against each other that means all pepoles have are diffrent nature. some peolple have more than more knowledgy but some peples have not to have knowledge to inderstand the difficult topics, at work,at school or in a daily life .if some individual have lower u derstandu knowledy then how can they learnd so,compared with other rather than best for should try cooperate with ownself.
In conclusion, individual have their own understanding way some people have more understand other citizen have difficult to understand.In my opinion, peolpe have there own menarakity to understand things but i agrre witj that try to cooperate more, rather than copared with other,competing against each other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both competition and cooperation, and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For example, the body paragraph attempting to explain the viewpoint on competition relies heavily on a single, personal anecdote about a school friend in a Nepali subject rather than exploring broader social or professional implications. Similarly, the arguments regarding cooperation are somewhat repetitive and lack clear extension. The writer's position is discernible by the end, but the overall development of ideas is restricted, placing this response at the band five level for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization present, with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, two body paragraphs, and the conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas across the text. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as repetitive transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'On the another hand'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, leaving the logical links between sentences feeling mechanical. While the essay maintains a discernible overarching topic, the structural flow lacks the smoother logical progression required for higher bands.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There is a heavy reliance on basic, repetitive words and phrases, such as 'competition', 'cooperate', 'work', and 'school'. Furthermore, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, including 'competion', 'botj', 'menarakity', and 'knowledgy'. The student attempts some less common items, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate word forms and incorrect collocations, restricting the overall lexical range to a basic level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences alongside attempts at complex forms that are frequently faulty. There are persistent, frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies, missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and poor punctuation (such as missing spaces after commas and periods). For instance, phrases like 'If you had not a plan you will top that person' and 'how can they learnd' contain multiple structural and agreement errors that can cause strain and difficulty for the reader.
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