Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few individual believe that competition at work, at school, and in daily life is a good thing. Other believe that people should try to cooperate more, rather than competiong against each other. I firmly believe that I'm againts of individual who like competing of there co-workers, classmates, and families in everyday because it is negative impact in your friendship and love ones. However, I believed that people should cooperate more in occupation and school to have a better lifestyle and peaceful environment.
Some people argue that competition in everyday life is a good thing. One major reason is that individual experienced a negative aspects such as detrimental environment and attitude towards other this is because they see there classmates or co-workers as a competitor. For example, in classroom students don't have a peceful area because of competition towards there classmates it can affect mental health.
On the other hand, other believe that we should try to cooperate rather that competing others. One major reason is that people have a peaceful environment and can communicate well in there co-workers or classmates at work and school, this is because they have a cooperation with each other. For instance, people who work in restaurant can ask a questions comfortable without hesitation and it makes productive at work.
Overall, I believe that to have a cooperation are crucial in daily life especially in the job and school to have a peaceful environment, comfortable people in your surroundings, and productive day. However, if you think competition it makes individual trigger stress and breeds toxicity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on competition versus cooperation and presenting a personal opinion. However, the task is only partially addressed because the ideas are limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on why competition is negative is restricted to vague statements like 'detrimental environment and attitude towards other' without robust support or clear examples. The writer's position is discernible, but the supporting arguments lack extension and tend to over-generalize, which prevents the response from achieving a higher level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organization evident through basic paragraphing and general topic separation, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often inadequate, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as relying heavily on 'However' and 'For example' without smooth transitions. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'this is because they see there classmates', where pronoun referencing fails to connect smoothly to the preceding clauses. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logical flow between sentences often falters.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'detrimental environment' and 'peaceful environment', but there are noticeable errors in word choice, form, and spelling throughout the text. Examples include 'competiong', 'againts', 'there' instead of 'their', 'peceful', and 'comfortable people'. These lexical errors and awkward word formations cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the vocabulary from reaching a more precise and flexible range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple patterns and basic complex sentences that are frequently faulty. Frequent grammatical errors occur across the text, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'Few individual believe', incorrect prepositions such as 'againts of individual', and problems with article usage and verb forms. These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation can cause strain and difficulty for the reader in interpreting the intended meaning.
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