Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Competition at work, at school, and in daily life is a good thing according to some people. But the others people believe that we should try to more cooperate, rather than competing against each other. I agree with both opinions.
To begin, they are several advantages of competition at work, at school, and in daily life. One of the major benefit is an opportunity to win the best awards. In school students or teachers try to doing their best skills in works. Teachers deliever their hundred percent efforts to teaching students and his best results in exams. If any one student got position in board exams they recieve award from school. And their teachers recieve best tacher award or best performance awards. At work places, many private or government organisations peoples competing to each other for best seller or best employeer, and many other awards. And in daily life, if any one has any skills
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
This response responds to the task only minimally, which is reflected in the length requirement not being met. As noted in the instructions, 22 words copied from the prompt were not counted, and the student's actual text is severely cut short at 133 words, falling well under the 250-word minimum. Because of this extreme under-length, the discussion of both views is barely initiated, and the student's opinion is only briefly stated at the outset ('I agree with both opinions') without any meaningful development or conclusion. Ideas are extremely limited and cut off mid-sentence at the end of the second paragraph ('And in daily life, if any one has any skills'), meaning the prompt is addressed only in a very partial and fragmented manner.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently across the text as a whole. While the essay begins with a standard introductory frame, the organisational structure breaks down rapidly. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second paragraph becomes a chaotic run of loosely connected thoughts about schools and workplaces that lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes faulty, such as 'To begin, they are several advantages' and 'And the others people', which fail to create smooth logical links. Furthermore, referencing is weak and confusing, leaving the reader struggling to follow how one idea leads to the next, particularly since the essay stops abruptly in the middle of a thought.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing common words that strain the reader's comprehension at times. There are frequent lexical errors in word form, word choice, and collocation throughout the short text. Examples include 'more cooperate' instead of 'cooperate more', 'others people', 'major benefit' paired with plural verb agreement issues elsewhere, 'doing their best skills in works', and 'deliever their hundred percent efforts to teaching'. The spelling of 'deliever' and 'employeer' also highlights limitations in lexical control. While the writer attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'organisation', 'competition', and 'awards', the high density of inaccurate word choices and non-standard collocations restricts the range to a basic level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex structures that contain frequent errors which distort meaning and cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent errors in verb forms, tenses, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'they are several advantages' (instead of 'there are'), 'students or teachers try to doing', and 'students... recieve award'. Article and pluralisation errors are also common, including 'in board exams', 'best tacher award', and 'At work places... peoples competing to each other'. Punctuation and basic sentence construction flaws are evident throughout, meaning that error-free sentences are rare, placing this aspect of the writing firmly at the lower end of the scale.
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