Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people thought that competition at workspace and at the school in everyday life is good thing but other argued that cooperation is more valuable against the competing. I believe that the cooperation is gives the positive results.

On the one hand, the people who think that competition in workplace and at the school is better. In workplace is the professional life its not the best place for competition and at school the competition is much valuable because in pupils the competitipon skills is develop but this is negative effect in professional life.

On the other hand, the people who think is that the cooperation is best rather than the competition they are absolutely right. For example, when we work in a offices or other workplace we work in a collaboration and we need anyone at anyone time so this is not the right place for competition.

Finally, in work the competition is not valuable and also at schools although, the competition is fail in corporate life with cooperate you can achieve many goal together with colleagues and partner.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to discuss both views on competition versus cooperation and provides a personal opinion, though the treatment remains quite limited. Additionally, it fails to meet the minimum length requirement of two hundred and fifty words, falling significantly short at one hundred and seventy-nine words. Ideas are presented but remain under-developed and lack sufficient support or relevant examples. For instance, the mention of how competition in schools develops skills while negatively affecting professional life is stated rather than explained. To reach a higher band, the writer would need to fully develop all parts of the prompt with extended explanations and examples, while ensuring the minimum word count is met.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some basic organisation, utilizing paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by repetitive phrasing and inadequate or inaccurate cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'Finally' are attempted, but referencing within and between sentences is often unclear, such as the abrupt shifts in the final paragraph. To improve cohesion, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive ties more accurately and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one to guide the reader smoothly through the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common topic-related vocabulary such as 'cooperation', 'competition', and 'professional life', but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form, such as 'at workspace', 'competitipon skills is develop', and 'with cooperate'. Spelling errors also occur. These limitations occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their lexical range and demonstrate greater control over word formation and collocations, avoiding repetitive use of basic terms like 'competition' and 'cooperation'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammar demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that result in faulty formations. Frequent errors occur across verb forms, articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'Some people thought that competition at workspace', 'the cooperation is gives the positive results', and 'we need anyone at anyone time'. These frequent errors can cause difficulty and strain for the reader. To progress to a higher band, the writer must incorporate a greater variety of complex sentence forms with better control, reducing basic structural errors and ensuring accurate punctuation and agreement.

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