Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good things however others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Well, in my opinion competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing is good to develop mindset or make career safe.

on of the crucial reason to make competition is eager to learn things or curious to known new things and want to do everythings by ownself. Thats make people active in everything ego to do and create fame. In addition some kinds of people have opportunities to get participants and show their talent which they want .

On the other hand , competition make all people behaviour to challange and it makes urban area develop by some kind. the main reason is that create activeness , energy . for example , There are five people and one is laziest but if there is about competition and prizes also then 5 out of 5 people wanted to participated and do by themself if makes their ego high and work hard .However there is no about challanging no one want to do something new .

In conclusion , competition at work , at schook and in daily life is a good things for all people because that makes all people active numoures eager to do , eager to learn, eager to create curious about all things.

in my view it is good to competition .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

First, it must be noted that the response contains only 208 words, which falls short of the minimum 250-word requirement. In addition, 44 words copied directly from the task prompt were not counted. Regarding task content, the response addresses the prompt only partially. While the writer touches on both views regarding competition and cooperation, the position is not always clearly sustained throughout the essay. The ideas presented are limited and remain largely under-developed, relying on repetitive assertions rather than extended, well-supported arguments. For instance, the discussion of urban development and laziness lacks concrete examples or clear explanations, preventing the response from achieving a higher standing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response demonstrates some organisation with basic paragraphing, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas from start to finish. Cohesive devices are used in a very limited and sometimes mechanical manner, such as repetitive transitions like 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion'. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical links between sentences and paragraphs. For example, sentences such as 'Thats make people active in everything ego to do and create fame' lack clear cohesive ties to preceding statements, resulting in a disjointed flow of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The writer uses a limited vocabulary range that is only minimally adequate for discussing the topic. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the text, such as 'things' instead of 'thing', 'known' instead of 'know', 'everythings' instead of 'everything', 'ownself', and 'numoures'. These lexical inaccuracies occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. While the student attempts to use some less common words related to the topic, such as 'curious', 'opportunities', and 'participated', frequent inaccuracies in collocation and word formation restrict the score to this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex or compound structures are consistently faulty. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'competition at work... is a good things however others believe', 'it is good to competition', and 'there is no about challanging no one want to do something new'. Punctuation is also erratic, with spaces frequently misplaced before commas. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, though the core meaning can still be deciphered in places.

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