Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A section of society beleive in to do competion in every type or work and daily life while others think that we should try to cooperate with each other rather than competete. in this essay we will discuss both view and give own opinion.
on the one hand life is a full of competion most of the indiviuals competitive each others and i think this is very usefull for every person because when one person sees another person to do good job and good study ,they may also be motivate to do better. this creates a healthy competion between them. moreover every business also need a competion to make a successful business. for example if only one business provide a everyday usefull product and there's no competition , it may charge high price. but if competition exists ,both business make to provide less price to attract customers. so these product is very usefull for everyday life and people benefits from fair price.
on the other hand when every person cooperate with each others in business and other work. they can achive many benefits , they can share there knowledge ,resources and experience. these things help them to make a succesfull business or others part of person. cooperate with each other also reduce cost and create a healthy relation with each others. moreover if every company cooperate they provide very usefull products in resonable price , which benfits customers as well.
in conclusion competition in very important because it help to motivate person to see your competitor. and cooperate is also important it helps to make a good relations and help each others in business or others things.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both competition and cooperation and providing a personal opinion, which places it within the mid-range of task achievement. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on business competition relies on a basic example about everyday products and pricing without extending the argument fully. Similarly, the section on cooperation touches upon sharing knowledge and reducing costs, but these points lack depth and specific support. While a clear position is stated in the introduction and reinforced in the conclusion, the overall development of ideas remains superficial and lacks the extended support characteristic of higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays some overall organization with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, the two body paragraphs representing different views, and the conclusion. There is an attempt to structure the text logically, using basic transitional phrases like 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion'. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by inadequate or repetitive cohesive devices. For example, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun shift in the conclusion ('to see your competitor'), and the repetition of words like 'moreover' and 'cooperate with each other' makes the cohesion feel mechanical and somewhat repetitive rather than fluid and natural.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'competitive', 'resources', and 'reasonable', but these attempts are frequently marred by noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling. Examples include 'beleive' instead of believe, 'competion' instead of competition, 'indiviuals' instead of individuals, 'usefull' instead of useful, and 'resonable' instead of reasonable. These lexical inaccuracies and persistent spelling mistakes create noticeable strain for the reader and reflect a limited lexical range that struggles to convey precise meanings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of basic sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are persistent errors in grammatical structures, verb forms, articles, and prepositions throughout the text. Examples include infinitive and gerund errors like 'beleive in to do competion', missing articles such as 'is a full of competion', subject-verb agreement issues like 'every business also need', and awkward phrasing like 'when one person sees another person to do good job'. These frequent grammatical errors cause noticeable difficulty and confusion for the reader, keeping the control of grammar at a basic level.
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