Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People are improving many in their thinking skills. There are a lot of sectors are coming and many people are getting more job opportunities. In the career sectors, still people are comparing themselves to others. This reflects a negative personalities to that specific person. This may explain more to details between competition person and cooperating person.

As working together in one company, collegue are still not happy working together with us. Some of the collegue likes to do given tasks by themselves just for getting some good praise from the management. They are equaling themselves with others to do the task given from the company. For example, when the manager giving the task, they might spilt into two to get know which collegue task is good enough to finalist.

However, collegues with pretty good hearts are still exist in this era. We do have collegues who like to open communication, discussing towards the task given and still encourage some slow learnes to give their opinion towards the task. For instance, whenever our co-workers are preparing task, the groups will start to do their discusion together. They might accept the opinion from other teams members. Also they will discuss together to do more better for the tasks given

In my opinion, I prefer to do the work amongest collugues. I believe sharing the ideas for the tasks given with teams members can help us to gain more different knowledge and getting more ideas. This helps to complete the tasks effective and submit within the timeline given

In conclusion, however still some of the collegues are using this two methods in their career life. We should remember that, encourage ourselves to be more kind and good hearted with our collegues that help us to achieves more valuables things in our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both competition and cooperation, and your preference for working together is clear in the paragraph beginning “In my opinion.” The examples about colleagues seeking management praise and teams sharing ideas are relevant to the topic. However, the response only partially develops the discussion: the disadvantages of competition are asserted (“This reflects a negative personalities”) rather than explained, and the benefits of competition are not really considered. The essay also focuses almost entirely on workplace situations, leaving the school and daily-life contexts unexplored. To strengthen the response, explain why competition can motivate people or improve performance, then weigh this against the benefits of cooperation and support your position with more specific reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for the introduction, competing colleagues, cooperative colleagues, your opinion, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify the main sections. Connectors such as “However,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” also signal some relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression is not consistently clear: the opening paragraph is vague and does not establish the two views, while the conclusion introduces “this two methods” without clearly summarising the discussion. Several sentences repeat the idea of tasks and colleagues, and references such as “they” and “this” are sometimes unclear. Use a more direct introduction, organise each body paragraph around one view, and link examples explicitly to the point they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “management,” “communication,” “opinion,” and “co-workers,” which helps convey the workplace examples. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, such as “negative personalities,” “good hearts,” and “finalist” for describing a task comparison. Spelling and word-form errors are also noticeable, including “collegue,” “discusion,” and “slow learnes.” Repetition of “task,” “given,” and “colleagues” further restricts the vocabulary. Build a more precise set of expressions for competition and cooperation, and check spelling and collocations so your meaning is consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “I believe sharing the ideas … can help us,” and use basic linking structures such as “However” and “For instance.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, and articles. For example, “There are a lot of sectors are coming” combines two structures incorrectly, while “colleagues … are still exist” has an incorrect verb form. In “when the manager giving the task,” the verb phrase is incomplete, and “helps to complete the tasks effective” uses an incorrect form after the verb. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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