Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

World's lives living being has been competition each others such as bactoria completative bacteria and human competative the other humans in the instant of such works. Some people believe that completation at work, at school and in daily life is a god thing. Others argue that we should try to comparate more, rather than competing against each other. In my opinion i strongly agree the first statement which is todays world as completiton for any work like school as well world because of, todays people think money is everything.

The primary reason for my opinion is people have think about the everything is money because the anything purchese needed the money. While this think completition is very important for human life. .For example, for the people can completition the money. If people can recieve the money they purchese the everything needed the shop as the home.

Another key argument, if don't has been conduct the completition people didn't strongly works in the works as well not thinking about the family as well the future. However, student didn't follow the study as well as the roles and regulation. Student easily graduated the gain certificate he didn't about what is the completition in the our daily lifes. For instant, ram recieve the graduated certificate but didn't think about the completition life.

In conclusion, I stongly argree that completation at work, at school and in daily life is good thing. While otehr agure that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing aagainst each other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference for competition, and the opening and conclusion both return to this view. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and cooperation is only mentioned in the introduction and conclusion; its possible benefits are not explained. Your reasons for competition focus mainly on money and motivation, but the examples are unclear and do not show convincingly how competition produces these outcomes. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally, with ideas that need relevant explanation and support. It also contains 224 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 29 words copied from the prompt do not count. Develop both viewpoints and add a specific, explained example for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs also signal an attempt to organise reasons, using phrases such as “The primary reason” and “Another key argument.” However, the progression within the body paragraphs is difficult to follow because claims, explanations and examples do not connect clearly. For instance, the link between money, competition and buying necessities is repeated without a clear sequence, while the example about Ram’s certificate does not clearly support the point about motivation. Some linking words, including “However” and “For example,” do not establish the relationship intended. Use one main idea per paragraph and connect each example explicitly to that idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-form errors sometimes strain the reader’s effort to understand the message. “Competition” and “people” recur often, while forms such as “completation,” “comparate,” “purchese” and “argree” make key ideas harder to recognise. Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, including “people can completition the money” and “the everything needed the shop as the home.” This limits the precision needed to explain the two viewpoints. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and practise using them in complete collocations, such as “compete for a job” and “cooperate with classmates,” rather than repeating the same general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts a few longer sentences and uses basic structures to state an opinion and give reasons, but grammatical control is very limited. Errors are frequent and sometimes distort meaning: “people have think about the everything is money” has an unclear verb pattern, and “if don't has been conduct the completition” does not form a workable conditional. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “is good thing” and the fragment-like “For example, for the people can…”. The isolated full stop in “life. .For example” further disrupts reading. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “if” and “although.”

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