Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Comping to the modern arc the competition at work, at school and in daliy life is a better way to prove your self but other believe that cooperate is best things to live a better life. I refuse to agree that its has more benifical side such as hepls to push over limites and improve skills.

To begin with, there are many reasons that can outwords the cooperate side people. To explain it, As we will kown about the competition it hepls to demostratic the skills you have but some peopels they are lacking on that but if the people compete with more skillfull people then people work hard to surpass the reivel. As the result, people can push the limite and hepls to achive the path they chosses. Similarly, if they compete with skillfull poeple then they can acompliced a lot of skills and methods form them in schools competition or work place.

On the other hand, some people think that the cooperate is the best way to live a life. To elaborate it, if the people cooperate with each other rather then comeiting with each other becasue in some case people hit each other due to ego if people competition then it will be slove.

To sum up. there are two kind of peoples who preffer competition or cooperate but i am the person who chosses the competition beacase i leran more things and it also help me to push my limit. The competiton is not a bad thing but destorying the people that make the competition bad if the competition and cooperate will mix then it will more effective then today's.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear preference for competition, especially in the opening and conclusion, and you offer relevant reasons: competing may motivate people to improve and learn from more skilled peers. This addresses the central topic, but the discussion of cooperation is only briefly introduced. The claim that cooperation can prevent conflict caused by ego is not explained with a concrete example or developed consequences, so the two views are not explored equally. Some points about competition, such as pushing limits and gaining skills, repeat rather than build into distinct supporting arguments. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits of cooperation in more depth, support each main point with a specific example, and clarify how competition and cooperation can work together.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting competition, a paragraph presenting cooperation, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the long first body paragraph, where several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries. The cooperation paragraph is very short and does not develop its point, while the conclusion introduces the idea of combining competition and cooperation without preparing it earlier. Some linking phrases are used mechanically or inaccurately. Organise each paragraph around one clear claim, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “surpass,” “skills,” and “ego,” and some choices communicate your intended ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “people,” “competition,” and “skills.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “daliy,” “benifical,” “demostratic,” and “acompliced”—make the writing harder to read. There are also inaccurate word forms and collocations, for example “the cooperate” and “push over limites.” These issues sometimes strain the reader’s understanding, which is why greater accuracy and variety are needed. Build a bank of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms, and natural combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “if” and “because,” but control is inconsistent. Many sentences contain errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms, which can make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “other believe that cooperate is best things” lacks clear grammatical structure, while “if the people cooperate … rather then comeiting … because” does not form a complete, well-controlled sentence. Punctuation also needs attention: the opening sentence joins contrasting ideas without a clear boundary, and “To sum up.” is incorrectly separated from the following sentence. Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause at a time.

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