Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Competition has become increasingly popular debate in this world nowadays. Many individuals believe that competition at work, at institute and it is crucial for daily lives. While, some members think taht we should try to asist others, instead of challenging each other. I partly agree with this statment because challenging creates numerous difficulties in society.

On the one hand, people want to treat others they are good as compare to then and make competitions. Initially, people make a competition at work it do not essential to compete other and it disturb the company enviornment, employes face numerous problems. Furthermore, people consider it at school level if they create in positive way it good for school students. For instance, some average learners make a competition with toppers its better because low level learns make more effort to compete them and they work hard in learning. Therefore, Competition is essiential for those who create friendly enviorments and treat it learners work hard to reach at toppers level.

On the other hand, individuals should try to cooperate with their competitors it create humble and soft image in society. Firstly, citizen helps each other it create trust and build strong relation with them. people need to trained their school going child in eraly age how to asist others in postive way if they learn it in early age how to deal and how to handle things they grew them at tiop level after few years. In addition, doctors cooperate with their patients some time even paitiens not have enough money to pay them but they treat equally because doctors knows the situations also their parents guide and treat them in early age to cooperate with everyone. For example, people faced road accident citizens take him to hospital but doctors start treatment first then they inform to their families it show hospitalies and humblness. As result, cooperation makes societly prefect in era.

In conclusion. Competitions are essential but in limited and postive way. Although, people start comeption with their fellows such as learning and improving skills but cooperation bulid a strong relation in the city or society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation, and your conclusion gives a position: competition can be useful when positive and limited, while cooperation strengthens relationships. The school example about average learners working harder to match top students is relevant and helps explain one benefit. However, the position is not fully consistent: the introduction says you partly agree because competition creates difficulties, but the conclusion calls competition essential without clearly reconciling these points. Several ideas are also under-developed or unclear, particularly the claims about workplace competition disturbing the company environment and cooperation making society “perfect.” Explain the mechanisms and consequences more precisely, and support each view with a focused example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the broad organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the cooperation paragraph moves from trust and children’s upbringing to doctors and road accidents without clearly connecting these examples to one central point. Some linking phrases are mechanical or awkward, including “Firstly,” “In addition,” and “As result,” and references such as “it” are sometimes unclear. Build each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence, using links that show the relationship between ideas rather than simply adding another point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “trust,” “strong relation,” and “improving skills.” There is also some effort to express more specific ideas, such as a “friendly” competitive environment. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow: “make a competition,” “treat others they are good as compare to then,” and “societly prefect in era” are examples. Spelling errors such as “enviornment,” “essiential,” and “humblness” are also noticeable. Learn common combinations such as “compete with colleagues” and “build strong relationships,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some attempts at complex structures, including “because challenging creates numerous difficulties” and the conditional idea “if they create in positive way.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “Initially, people make a competition at work it do not essential to compete other” combines clauses without correct punctuation and has problems with verb forms and sentence structure. There are also recurring issues with articles, agreement, and plurals, as in “citizen helps each other” and “doctors knows.” Punctuation is inconsistent, including the fragment-like opening “In conclusion.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses and clear punctuation.

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