Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Many individuals believe that competition at work,at school and in regular life is positive thing . But other group of people believe that we should try it difficulty,rather then in other way.This essay will be discuse both viewpoint and opinion.which will be highlighted in subsequent pharagraph to be leading a logical conclusion.

To commence with,many people are comfortable in work at school and daily life.Because citizen are develop there habit in work at school or they are more interested work at school.For example teachers are feel comfortable in woek at school because they are habit in work daily life at school only and his skill only about school work.Moreover,some individouals are thing work in daily life is good thing bacuse people adjust in comforte for their life in the daily routine.In other word many people are feel good for work in daily life and it is good source for mental and physical health.

In other words many citizen believe it is cooprate for competing against each other because in workat school is more streesfull and unrelaxed because in which students are much more and they cannot understanding any thing for about their nature and they cannot good in respect for their teacher.To elaborate work in their daily life his disconcated for their weekend enjoyfull life and they cannot feel comfortable spending time with their family.

In conclusion,the view point of bath view in my opinion pepole are more comfortable in their daily life and work at school because they many people developement their habit in daily work at school and daily routine.Besides, it is more cooperate because people are become more stressfull and feel uncomfortable in worl at school because in students are cannot understanding about rescepeting for their teacher.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that the topic concerns competition and cooperation, and it gives a general preference for people feeling comfortable in familiar routines. However, it does not clearly discuss the benefits of competition or explain the case for cooperation; instead, the body paragraphs focus mainly on comfort, stress and school routines. The opening also promises to discuss both views, but the ideas that follow do not establish what competition achieves or how cooperation helps people. The conclusion repeats the same unclear position rather than resolving the comparison. To strengthen the response, explain a specific advantage of competition, such as motivating people to improve, then contrast it with cooperation’s benefits and give a clear, supported opinion. The eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “For example,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the essay. However, the ideas are not arranged in a coherent progression: the first body paragraph discusses comfort and routine, while the next begins “In other words” but shifts to stress and difficulty without clearly developing a contrasting view. Several sentences are hard to connect, and references such as “it” and “which” do not make the intended meaning clear. The conclusion repeats points without bringing the discussion together. Use one paragraph for each view, begin each with a clear main idea, and make each example directly support that idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a basic set of topic-related words, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “stressful,” “comfortable” and “routine,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate, which strains the reader’s effort to understand the argument. Examples include “we should try it difficulty” and “it is cooperate for competing,” where the intended meaning is unclear, as well as repeated use of “work at school” and “daily life.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “discuse,” “individouals” and “development” also reduce clarity. Build a small bank of accurate phrases for the two views, such as “foster teamwork” and “motivate people to improve,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic linking structures, including “because,” “for example” and “although”-type contrasts, but sentence control is inconsistent. Many clauses are incomplete or incorrectly joined: “Because citizen are develop there habit…” is a fragment, while “teachers are feel comfortable” and “they cannot understanding” show problems with verb forms. Agreement and articles are also unreliable, as in “many people are comfortable” followed by “citizen are develop,” and punctuation is frequently misplaced, including spaces before full stops and missing spaces after commas. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while” and “although.”

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