Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Competiton the Very common in every aspect of our daily life in now days. While individuals thinks that competition is beneficial at work, school and daily life but others consider cooperate can be more satisfy someone, more than challenging against each other. I agree both of these statements,because this two statement is eqally workable for different situations.

On the one hand, competition can be helpfull for one who want to gain success for futuer. Competitions, Challenges can carry a person to top of the excilence. At school, it is mandatory. By doing it, student can go deeper with their accademics. As the result can be seen on his marksheet. on the other hand, sharing notes is a example of cooperating, which is the basic behaviour that a student should learn from school. But sometime, in regular life competiton can motive us to accomplish to a great dea; It can also lead to ruthless behaviour. Moreover, in workplace it improves the pace of the work and through to a excilent outcome .

Cooperate with other shows the kindness of individuals. By being kind we can achive a harmony society. Competion in every aspect of life is a foolish decison. As a exchample if we are compete with our relatives or neighbour it just shows the jealousy and tends us to be a bad charecter to the society.

We are social beigs, so if we could achive a smooth life by cooperate with othes why we choose the competiton.

In conclution, life Can be very easy with the contrast between ccmpetiton and cooperation. Competiton have perticular segment like education, sport and so on. But coopeeration is mandatory for every aspect for a clam life. To lead a problemless, enemyless healthy life cooperating with every one is a noticable habit. Compition is also essential to prove someones self to the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and give a personal view, especially in the opening and conclusion. Relevant examples include competition in education and the idea of sharing notes, as well as competing with relatives or neighbours. However, the position is not consistently clear: you say you agree with both views, then call competition in every aspect foolish, and later say it is essential to prove oneself. Several points are asserted rather than explained—for example, how competition improves workplace outcomes or why cooperation creates social harmony. Develop each side with a clear explanation and a specific example, then state precisely when you believe competition or cooperation is preferable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven. The first body paragraph moves from academic competition to sharing notes, then to motivation and workplace outcomes without clearly connecting these points. The contrast between the two views is also difficult to follow, and the conclusion introduces several new claims rather than drawing together the discussion. Some linking phrases are used mechanically or inaccurately. Organise one paragraph around the benefits and risks of competition and another around cooperation, using clear topic sentences and references that make each idea’s relationship explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “ruthless behaviour,” “harmony” and “workplace,” and some choices communicate relevant ideas. However, the range is limited and several word forms, collocations and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “more satisfy someone,” “carry a person to top of the excilence,” “a great dea” and “enemyless healthy life.” Repetition of “competition” and “cooperation” also limits flexibility. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer natural combinations such as “achieve success,” “improve productivity” and “a harmonious society.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if we could achieve a smooth life … why we choose the competition.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation can make the reader pause. For instance, “While individuals thinks … but others consider” combines incompatible structures, while “this two statement is” has agreement and number problems. “Competitions, Challenges can carry a person” also lacks a clear grammatical connection between its subjects and verb. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses accurately. Check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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