Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

INTRODUCTION

In our opinine competition in every field of work, at school and in daily life is good thing but it must be in a postive way and healthy.competition give us energy that keeps our body motivated and focused us on our work.

BODY

Competition is very important if we take in postive way that give us postive energy.but in some time people comparing their children, collegue with others and in that point it may be turn to negative perspective. every person has different abaility and creativity so no one is judge just on the basis of another abaility.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You express a relevant view that competition can be beneficial when it is healthy, and you recognise a possible drawback when people compare children or colleagues. However, the response does not discuss cooperation as a contrasting view, and your own opinion is only briefly stated rather than explained with reasons or examples. The point that people have different abilities and creativity could support a useful argument, but it is not developed. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words: it contains 91 words, with 8 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. To address the task more fully, explain both perspectives, state your position clearly, and support each main point with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The labels “INTRODUCTION” and “BODY” show an attempt to organise the response, and the ideas move from a general view of competition to a concern about comparisons. However, the essay has only a short introduction and one body paragraph, with no conclusion or clear progression through both sides of the question. Connections between ideas are sometimes abrupt: “but in some time” does not clearly signal the intended contrast, and the final point about individual ability is not linked explicitly to the argument. Develop separate paragraphs for competition, cooperation, and your opinion, using clear transitions and references so the reader can follow how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “competition,” “motivated,” “focused,” “comparing,” and “creativity,” which helps communicate the general subject. There is also an attempt to express nuance through “positive way” and “negative perspective.” However, the range is narrow and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “opinine,” “postive,” “abaility,” and “collegue.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “give us energy” and “in that point.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and use vocabulary for the missing cooperation perspective, such as “collaborate,” “share responsibility,” and “achieve a common goal.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and an attempt at a longer sentence, for example, “every person has different abaility and creativity so no one is judge just on the basis of another abaility.” This shows an effort to connect related ideas, but sentence structures remain limited and errors occur in articles, agreement, and verb forms. For instance, “competition … is good thing” needs an article, “competition give us energy” has subject–verb disagreement, and “no one is judge” needs a passive form such as “no one should be judged.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex structures using clauses such as “although” and “because.”

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