Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era everyone is workhard to become first and lead world. It is a good thing, many people thought that they should competate in every prespective of life while some belive that we should try to mannge with other people in their work, at school and in daily life.In may opinion taking other in every thing has many benifits while in some situation competion in also worthfull.

The person working in same filed could have competation in their filed because it make them to work more actively and sharply and saving time of customer.We sholud have competation in school but only with those students who are at same level, because in competitave environments many students work more acurate and quite efficiently. As the competator person can manage this life better in all prespectives and is success full life.

While every person is not brillents in every felid, so some time manage to other people would be more relistic option.For example in our daily life on work, school and daily life, a lot of people are below us so cooprativing with them would also give hope to live and manage their life according to surronding.Many people need finical help, some recquire moral support.

In conclusion , i would say both the point view has has equal advantages in life, but

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by saying competition can make people work “more actively” and that cooperation can support people who need “financial help” or “moral support.” However, the discussion is only partial: the examples are brief, and the benefits of cooperation are not clearly explained. Your own position is also difficult to identify. “In my opinion” introduces a preference for helping others, but the conclusion says both views have equal advantages and then stops before completing the thought. The response also falls 29 words short of the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop the arguments. State a consistent view and explain each main point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting competition, one on cooperation, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and several ideas are difficult to connect. For example, the claim that competition saves customers’ time is not explained, while “a lot of people are below us” does not clearly show how cooperation helps. Linking phrases such as “While” and “For example” are attempted, but the example does not develop a specific situation. The conclusion is unfinished, so the essay lacks a clear ending. Use a clear topic sentence for each view, then connect each reason to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competitive environments,” “moral support,” and “financial help,” and the reader can generally recognise the intended discussion. However, the range is limited and frequent spelling and word-form errors make the writing harder to follow, as in “competate,” “prespective,” “cooprativing,” and “brillents.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “saving time of customer” and “success full life.” These issues sometimes cause difficulty for the reader, which is consistent with this level. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, for example, “competition encourages people to work efficiently” and “cooperation provides practical or emotional support.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “While every person is not…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “everyone is workhard” and “it make them,” while sentence construction is unclear in “As the competator person can manage this life better.” The opening sentence also runs several ideas together without clear punctuation, and the final sentence is incomplete. These frequent problems can make the reader pause to work out the intended meaning. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example: “Competition can encourage workers to perform more efficiently.”

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