Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

some people thinking competition at work at school and in daily life is agood thing amd other we should try to coperate more rather than competing against each other

yo commerce with i agreed with this we should try to add more thing like games which is cricket or other thing it is very benificial for children and teacher also because this little thing makes happy both and sometimes it release stress who gives us by study and many we should like to add i unable to remember nut those thing is very benefical for them

begin with i agreed with this but some disbenifits of those thing who try to adding in competition in school daily life that is games gives us bad effects like they distract from study that is not good for students but one thing i know sports has a different level of carrier who dosenot reach by other things but it has many competition so study gives you many fields like engineering and science other things i unable to remember

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to address both sides by mentioning competition’s possible drawbacks—games may distract students from study—and the benefits of sport, including stress relief and career opportunities. However, the discussion is very brief and does not clearly explain the view in favour of competition or develop the cooperation view. Your position is difficult to identify: “i agreed with this” does not make clear which view you support, and the response shifts between ideas without a reasoned conclusion. The response contains 165 words, so it is 85 words below the 250-word minimum; this limits how fully you can answer the task. To improve, state your opinion clearly, explain both views with relevant examples, and conclude by summarising your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise ideas, including an opening that restates the topic and a later shift to disadvantages (“begin with i agreed with this but…”). Some links between points are also attempted through “but” and “because.” However, the response reads largely as one continuous sequence rather than a clearly organised essay, and the progression is hard to follow. Ideas such as games relieving stress, distracting from study, and creating sports careers are introduced without clear connections or separate development. Phrases such as “many we should like to add” and “other things i unable to remember” interrupt the flow. Use distinct paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “stress,” “students,” “sports,” and “career.” These help the reader recognise the general subject, and “release stress” shows an attempt to express a specific benefit. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, with broad phrases such as “other thing,” “little thing,” and “many fields.” Spelling and word-form errors—including “coperate,” “benificial,” and “disbenifits”—also make the writing less clear and controlled. Build a more precise range for discussing advantages and disadvantages, such as “teamwork,” “academic performance,” and “career prospects,” and check spelling and collocations. This would let you explain your ideas more accurately rather than relying on vague wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences using connectors such as “because,” “that,” and “but,” and the reader can sometimes follow the intended meaning. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or poorly controlled, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur throughout. For example, “some people thinking competition” lacks a finite verb, while “other we should try” does not form a complete clause. In “this little thing makes happy both,” the sentence structure and object placement are unclear. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, making it difficult to distinguish ideas. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate conjunctions. Check each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and punctuation before adding further detail.

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