Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In current modern world ratio of compedition is on peak timeline. every individual facing similar isuue.and it is quite prevent subject in our life, however it is also

essentaily proven at some of the work place.

disscusing about emoulation at school or at work place it is quite helpfull for the children and the worker or the ruler if they take copedition in positive manner it help them to grow faster and in displined way beacuse if you have good compnenin with whom you have to compite it gave you more power and make you more consistent towards your path for example if children take are studying on the bealf to compitte with other rival, so it could improve thier knowldege and skills of achiving something in their life this way they are also ready for the life.

wheras, spaeking about that people should avoid competing with each other and do work with unitedly this area of work is also quite relvent beacuse when socitey does not had any compedition or rivalry so it should be quite easier to live beacuse people or like to learn often from the other people they don't feel hesited to ask for help parents are also quite sastified with the reasult they dont expect unneccery demads to the children so yes having no compedition in the world makes world more peascefull.

in my prespective competition should be balnced and people should be aware more how to compete beacuse ruthless competiton had no meaning beacuse i also face this thing in my school period and now that kind of competition does nothing and i am cherryising my artist life peacefully.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both perspectives and give a personal view: the second paragraph explains how competition may motivate students and workers, while the third describes benefits of cooperation, such as learning from others and asking for help. Your conclusion also states that competition should be balanced. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The example about studying to compete with a rival is relevant, but the benefits of cooperation are mostly asserted rather than illustrated or explained in detail. The opening is difficult to interpret, so it does not clearly establish the issue or your position. To strengthen the response, explain each side with a specific example and make your view clear from the introduction as well as the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with separate sections for competition, cooperation and your opinion. Connectors such as “whereas” and “in my perspective” help signal changes in focus. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the opening is fragmented, and the first paragraph moves between work, school and personal development without a clear sequence. Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, and long sentences make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, the sentence beginning “if children take are studying” contains several ideas without clear boundaries. Use one main point per paragraph, organise supporting explanations and examples in a logical order, and use clear sentence punctuation and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “rivalry,” “consistent,” “unitedly” and “peaceful,” and you try to express ideas about motivation and cooperation. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to understand, as in “compedition,” “emoulation,” “compnenin” and “cherryising.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “ratio of competition is on peak timeline” and “take competition in positive manner.” This limits the precision and flexibility of your vocabulary. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe competition as “intense” or “at its peak,” and say that people “compete in a healthy way.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using conditional and subordinate clauses, including “if you have good…with whom you have to compete” and “when society does not have any competition.” This shows an effort to use more than simple sentences. However, the range is limited in practice because many complex sentences are faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation can impede understanding. Examples include “every individual facing,” “it help them,” and “society does not had.” Several sentences run on without clear punctuation, making it difficult to identify the main clause. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking subject–verb agreement and tense consistency.

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