Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There must be competition in the market because in competition everyone did their best and always work hard.By compition persons judge theirselves. In school there must be compition and students work hard and get position.There must be compitition between peoples.By compitition every person did their best.By compitition everyone know where he is it.

But on the other hand there is cooperation.We should be cooperative.We always help each other.But by cooperation persons become lazy.They did not work hard.Person should be kind and resceptfull but there must be compition in market.

Compition must be necessary.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You express a clear preference for competition, especially in school and the market, and give a basic reason: people may work hard and judge their performance. You also acknowledge cooperation and mention helping one another, so both views are present. However, the discussion is very brief and repetitive, and the benefits of cooperation are not explained; instead, the claim that it makes people lazy is unsupported. The response also does not develop examples or explain your position in enough detail to fully address the task. The required minimum length is not met: the response is 157 words short. To improve, explain each side with a specific example and show why you ultimately favour one approach.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall structure: the opening section focuses on competition, and “But on the other hand” introduces cooperation before the final statement of your view. This gives the reader a simple sense of contrast. However, ideas within the sections are mostly repeated rather than developed, as several sentences restate that competition makes people do their best. The links between points are limited, and the final sentence, “Compition must be necessary,” does not clearly summarise the comparison. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs for the two views and your conclusion, and connect each claim to an explanation or example. This would create a more coherent progression rather than a list of similar statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic but communicates the central topic, with relevant terms such as “competition,” “cooperative,” “help each other,” and “work hard.” The repeated use of “compition” and “by compitition” limits variety and makes the response sound repetitive. There are also spelling errors, including “compition,” “resceptfull,” and “theirselves,” and some expressions are not natural in this context, such as “get position” and “where he is it.” These choices can make parts of the message less clear. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing advantages and disadvantages, such as “assess their progress” or “work towards a shared goal,” and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You mainly use short, simple statements, for example, “We should be cooperative” and “We always help each other.” These communicate straightforward ideas, but there is little variety in sentence structure, and errors occur frequently. In “in competition everyone did their best and always work hard,” the verb forms do not agree consistently; “persons become lazy” also needs a more natural plural construction, such as “people may become less motivated.” Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the opening sequence. Practise combining related ideas with accurate clauses—for example, using “because” or “although”—and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Greater control of these basics would make your meaning easier to follow.

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