Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is undenaible that in this competetive era, individuals faces competition while studing, working as well as in daily life. A section of society asserts it is beneficial while others argue that people should try to do teamwork. This essay will discuss about both the view points and give verdict opinion.

To commence with the former notion as firstly, students can consentrate more on studies to defeat other or getting good position in school everyone try to perform better leads to achieving high scores in academics. Secondly, in the field of jobs employers will give extra time to get incentives or to get high position in a company which develop their skill more. Additionally, a person can improve confidence, skills by the use of competeting others

For example, In India, having largest population helps to select only those candidates who are scored higher and having talent for government jobs.

On the other hand as, competition creates stress for mentors to their exams due to they are forced by teachers or parents to perfrom well hence it is a good way to solve doubts by together resulting in to live a stress free life or other restriction. However, co-operation provides creativity or develops new ideas for projects which is not profit for employees as well as for company to grow fast. Furthermore, societies can easily handle local issues by helping each other that is neccessary or credit to humanity.

To conclude, undoubtedly both the ideas has its own significance. Moreover, accodring o my prespective in study, work and everyday life coopreation is priorties more than competetion it ehnance stress that will effects mankinds by working freely with the help of other posses more relevancy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for cooperation in the conclusion. The points about competition encouraging students to achieve higher scores and workers to develop skills are relevant, while the India example gives some support to the argument about selection for government jobs. However, several ideas are only briefly stated or difficult to interpret. The explanation of cooperation and stress, for instance, is unclear, and the claim that cooperation is “not profit for employees as well as for company” does not clearly explain its benefit. Develop each main point with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation or a specific example, and make your own position explicit earlier as well as in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “On the other hand” and “To conclude.” However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from students to employees and then confidence without clearly connecting the points, while the second combines stress, creativity, and community issues in a confusing sequence. Some linking phrases, including “To commence with the former notion as firstly” and “On the other hand as,” are awkward or redundant. Organise each body paragraph around one central claim, then explain and illustrate it; use fewer, more precise transitions and clearer references between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “incentives,” “confidence,” “creativity,” and “local issues,” and use some topic-related expressions such as “government jobs.” However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the argument difficult to understand: “competetive,” “consentrate,” “perfrom,” and “coopreation” are examples. Phrases such as “defeat other,” “high position,” and “credit to humanity” are also imprecise or unnatural in context. Build accuracy with common collocations before reaching for more complex wording, and proofread spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “outperform other candidates” and “career advancement” would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, for example, “which develop their skill more” and “that will effects mankinds.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction frequently make meaning unclear. Examples include “individuals faces,” “employers will give extra time … which develop,” and “both the ideas has.” The sentence beginning “On the other hand as” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and read each sentence aloud to identify incomplete or tangled constructions.

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