Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modern world, majority of many government schools from their chilhood are trying to take part in competition at work is a beneficial thing in their daily life.Whereas, other argue that pupils have to cooperate more in their studies rather than competition against with each other. I will Discussboth the view prior to terminate.

To begin with, many numerous today are taking part in various games such as footboll, tennis, cricket. However, this part of game which encourage to work more and enjoyed. In addition, deparity from two youngster try to make competition in the game hence it is best way to rose dramatically developed communication skills. For instance, In Japan many schools that they has initiate this projects and from their child try to make competition therefore their genral knowleage which climb. Moreover, playing a different games which friends it make better comfortable from their hectic routine.

On the other hand, some individuals today ought to try more in cooperate dur their rising understand so they make a good marks in their entier lifestyle. Consequently, many residents lossing their childhood memories owing to many schools and their parents alwaya say to focus in study rather than games. On account of game can not growing to earn more funds. For Example, In india many father they are not allow to play game but alway main focus in their board exam to complete with higher marks therefore 90% of students in india loss their freedom.

To conclude, government ought to take serious action in this platform that chuild have to take part in game rather than studies it decline their skills. From my precpective, citizen should got a chance to take part in competition however it hiking their mood rapidly to win the matches.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the prompt and give a personal view, particularly in the conclusion, where you support allowing children to compete. However, the discussion is only partly focused on the question: the first body paragraph mainly describes sports and their benefits, while the prompt asks about competition at work, school and in daily life. The cooperation argument is also unclear; the point about parents prioritising exams over games does not explain how cooperation benefits people. Examples about Japan and India are asserted rather than explained, so they provide limited support. To strengthen the response, explain each view directly, develop relevant reasons, and make your position clear from the introduction and consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal these sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first paragraph moves from sports to communication skills, a Japan example, and routine without clearly connecting the points. Linking expressions such as “Consequently” and “On account of” do not always show the intended relationship between ideas. Some references, including “this part of game” and “this projects,” are unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “communication skills,” and “childhood memories.” There is also some effort to vary expression, for example “hectic routine” and “take part.” However, the range is limited and many inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to interpret, as in “rose dramatically developed communication skills,” “make a good marks,” and “hiking their mood.” Spelling errors such as “chilhood,” “footboll,” “genral,” and “precpective” are noticeable. Aim to use familiar words accurately before attempting more elaborate phrasing, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe how competition “helps develop” skills rather than using an unclear verb sequence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas,” “however,” and “because”-type reasoning. Nevertheless, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes the intended meaning hard to follow. Examples include “many schools that they has initiate this projects” and “many father they are not allow to play game”; these show problems with clause structure, agreement, and verb forms. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “a different games” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Review agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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