Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Competing to each others in a good way is getting better from each other.Its a good thing if youre competing friendly.If you aint friends and competing agressively then it couldve conclusions in physical clash or verbal arguements.My friend named Husnain.We both were together from class playgroup and we are so close to each other.Our grades remain constant throughtout the years.We both try to compete each other and laugh together too.We never had any type of physical clash.

If some random peoples getting competion from each other.They should respond them in their action not in words or physical clash.

A very good friend of mine,We had played cricket for a very long period of time.He was good batsmen while i was very good bowler.We both always try to compete each other in same category,Sometimes he won and sometimes i won,We were so happy.After some time a unknown person joins us and start competing with me.I am very chill and a clam person,But he always getting on my nerves.So,We both agreed for a single over match after a week.I started grind to beat him and likewise,He started to grind to.

The day when the match gonna start,He brings 10-15 people with him.When the match started,He was in agressive mood and start abusing me.As i told,I am calm person.So,I was ignoring him.You all know,Steady and clam person always win,And guess what?I won that match and he started to abuse me and i was still laughing bescause I know he can do nothing except this.So,Inshort you should compete with each other but stay clam and enjoy your competitions

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response gives a personal view that competition can be positive when people remain calm and friendly, and the cricket stories provide relevant examples. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and cooperation is not meaningfully explored as a separate view. The opening briefly contrasts friendly and aggressive competition, but does not explain why people might cooperate or how cooperation benefits work, school, or daily life. Your position is also expressed mainly through the final advice to compete calmly, rather than being clearly established and developed across the response. To improve, explain the advantages of each approach, compare them, and support your opinion with reasons that directly address the question, not only personal anecdotes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: it introduces friendly competition, gives examples, and ends with a recommendation. The two cricket anecdotes also provide some progression from positive rivalry to conflict. However, the organisation is difficult to follow because the examples dominate and there is no clear paragraph structure separating the two views or developing the argument. Connections between ideas are often abrupt, such as the shift from the childhood friend to “some random peoples,” and the long match story contains many events without clear signposting. Repeated links such as “So,” “As I told,” and “And guess what?” make the writing sound conversational and mechanical. Use distinct paragraphs for competition, cooperation, and your conclusion, with clearer transitions that show how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competing,” “aggressively,” “physical clash,” and “grades,” and the cricket example gives you words suited to that context. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or informal, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow. For example, “competing to each others” and “getting competion from each other” do not express the intended idea naturally, while “getting on my nerves” and “grind to beat him” are conversational rather than appropriate for an academic essay. Spelling errors such as “agressive” and “bescause” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise topic vocabulary and use standard academic phrasing to describe rivalry, cooperation, and its effects.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic time references to narrate events, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined with commas, and errors occur frequently. Examples include “If you aint friends and competing agressively then it couldve conclusions,” where the conditional structure and verb pattern are unclear, and “He was good batsmen while i was very good bowler,” which lacks articles. Verb forms are also inconsistent in “an unknown person joins us and start competing” and “When the match started, He was in agressive mood and start abusing me.” Capitalisation and punctuation are unreliable, particularly after commas and at sentence boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using “although,” “because,” and “while,” checking tense consistency, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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