Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argue that few people is it good to be competition at work station and in academics.Others believe that we need to focus more on themselves instead of competing with respect to one another.

I believe that being competitive with each other is to a large extent,I will discuss both views in this essay and stays my opinion in end of this essay.

One the one hand,being goal oriented with everyone will plays a major role in lives.This improves the more energetic ,being more attentive in the work or studies and can compare oneself from past to present and how to set goals for further these achievements will make to walk on the right path without any disruptions.For example in classroom if there is an contest between boys and girls,they can participate with enthusiastic in order to win the opposition to win the prize,these types of race can encourages the children skills.

On the other hand,being cooporate more on personally rather than taking challenges in life cannot be get confident to achieve the aim in life.Such of regular employment cannot show any progress in life as a result,this push downs in the life any make to feel guilty or sad when they view others success.Being focus on work essential but competitive with others is make development in academics or in studies.

For instance,In Wipro IT solutions there will be an Appreciation award for every ninty days for their office job, although there is an hike in salary .For completing work in time before others completed can make themselves proud and success.

In conclusion, although there are valid arguments on both sides,I strong believes that competition at work, academics in daily life is a good thing because it results in successfull career and growth in life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a preference for competition, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The classroom contest and Wipro award are relevant examples, so the response is connected to the topic. However, the position is not consistently clear: the sentence “I believe that being competitive with each other is to a large extent” is incomplete, and the paragraph about cooperation mainly describes the disadvantages of not competing rather than explaining why cooperation can be valuable. Several points, such as competition making people energetic or helping career growth, are asserted without enough explanation. Develop both viewpoints more evenly, explain the effects of each, and make your own position clear from the beginning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, examples and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “For instance” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are joined without clear relationships. For example, the first body paragraph moves from goal-setting to classroom contests and children’s skills without fully explaining the links. Some transitions are also inaccurate or awkward, and the conclusion repeats the main claim rather than drawing the discussion together. Organise each body paragraph around one clear viewpoint, then use linking phrases to show cause, contrast and example more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “competitive,” “cooperate,” “achievements,” “employment” and “Appreciation award,” and the examples show an attempt to discuss education and the workplace. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “being goal oriented with everyone,” “push downs in the life” and “win the opposition to win the prize.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “cooporate,” “ninty” and “successfull.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing teamwork, motivation and workplace performance, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “although” and “because,” but complex sentences are often faulty and errors occur frequently. Examples include “It is often argue,” “This improves the more energetic,” and “these types of race can encourages,” which show problems with verb forms and sentence construction. Agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “there will be an Appreciation award” and “competition … is a good thing” alongside plural references. Punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops are often inaccurate, making some sentences harder to read. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, verb forms and punctuation before submitting.

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