Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often aurged that the competition at work and other diffirent tasks in our daily life is beneficial way.while other campare that we should help each other in this particular tasks,rather than to challanege with them.I this eassy i will discuss both of views and give my opinion.

The way of challaneging at work and our daily lifestyle have a numerous benefits. firstly, the competition among different people is also more significant way of their job promotion.In this way people try to do their best and also trying to do such a good tasks and gets promotion in this regard.moreover, its also beneficial for the manageing time for the people.Therefore, people also set their daily rountine and they do this effectivly do good tasks.

On the other hand, the statement of help each other in these particular tasks also more beneficial ,inatially its more domient way for best work, when many are people do same task with helping each other then its result also good in this regard. its morelike beneficial in best relations between thse colleuge and greats more good enviroment for the working place, whereas if people try to campate to each other so there is a chance to more challaneging enviroment . so maybe is cooprate with each other is more beneficial for the enviroment.

In conclusion, i strongly believe that cooperate to each other is more beneficial rather then the compettion.its mainly create a good relation between the collueges and more efficient work.Therefore, i kept for helping each other in particular tasks in beneficial

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and state a clear preference for cooperation in the conclusion. The discussion of competition includes relevant points about promotion and time management, while the cooperation paragraph mentions better relationships and a more positive workplace. However, these ideas are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported with a specific example, and some points are unclear—for instance, how competition helps people manage time. Your position is clearest at the end, but the introduction does not yet establish your view, and the final sentence repeats the preference without adding support. Develop each main point with a brief explanation or example, and make your opinion clear from the beginning to strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the discussion. You also use signposts such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, connections within sentences are sometimes mechanical or unclear, and several ideas run together, particularly in the cooperation paragraph. References such as “these particular tasks” and “this regard” do not always make clear which idea is being discussed. Use shorter, more clearly organised sentences, and ensure each paragraph develops one central point in a logical sequence. More precise referencing would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “promotion,” “cooperate,” “beneficial,” and “environment,” and you distinguish between the two positions. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “beneficial,” “tasks,” and “each other.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “aurged,” “diffirent,” and “colleuge,” make the writing less clear, while inaccurate word choices and collocations—including “challaneging at work” and “domient way”—sometimes obscure your meaning. Build a reliable set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. Aim to use precise phrases such as “compete for promotion” and “collaborate on a task” rather than repeating general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some linking structures, such as “when many are people do same task…” and “whereas if people try…”. However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of errors in word order, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “people try to do their best and also trying to do such a good tasks and gets promotion” shifts verb forms and does not maintain agreement. The opening also joins separate ideas with a full stop and lowercase “while.” These recurring problems can make the intended meaning unclear. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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