Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is helpful to develop our status about finance and built mindset strong. But, if you support to each other it will less stressful. Many people have mentality to have race in our daily work or business. Although, others prefer try to support each other rather than do competition.

If you do your work with doing competition with others it may be improve your confidence strong. Moreover, people work with this mindset, it helps to improve their analytical thinking. If people not compare their lifestyle with other they have no worry about it. If they do no compare with other they do not invest more and have less stress about financial issue.

Increase pace in developing your business if you comparing with anyone. This thing also helps in generating more creative ideas.

You have stress free life when you stop competing your work. In Addition, it is easily accessible for family to spent valuable time with them without any hesitation.

It creates your thoughts to developing more and it goes towards the path of growth in work. Furthermore, it helps to be a problem solver and being well-organized. There are enjoyable life to have free time to enjoy entertainments with friends when you not compare. If you do not compete, you have no enemies.

To Conclude, It helps in expansion of opportunities towards money making if working continuously due to compare with others. The people who feels enough money is good for living ambitious life is right thing form them. I strongly believe towards the competition in work develops your mindset strong.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by mentioning the benefits of competition, such as improving confidence and generating ideas, and the benefits of cooperation, including reduced stress and more time with family. Your conclusion also gives a clear preference for competition. However, the discussion is only partial: the cooperation side is not explained as cooperation at work or school, and several points are asserted rather than supported with reasons or examples. The opening reference to “status about finance” is unclear, and the final point about people who feel they have enough money is difficult to connect to the question. Develop fewer relevant ideas more fully, explain how they affect people, and support them with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “To Conclude” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the discussion shifts between competition, comparing lifestyles, stress, family time and business growth without a clear structure for the two opposing views. Some links are also confusing, as in “If people not compare their lifestyle with other they have no worry about it,” which does not clearly connect to the preceding point about competition. Organise the body into one paragraph for competition and one for cooperation, and use clear topic sentences and references to make each point’s relationship explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “analytical thinking,” “creative ideas,” “problem solver” and “well-organized.” These choices show some effort to express different benefits of competition and cooperation. However, the range is limited and several word combinations or forms are unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning hard to understand. For example, “develop our status about finance,” “support to each other” and “expansion of opportunities towards money making” do not express the intended ideas clearly. Repeated use of “compare” and “competition” also limits precision. Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check collocations, such as how verbs combine with “competition,” “cooperation” and “opportunities.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and conditional structures, including “If you do your work…” and “Although, others prefer…,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “it will less stressful,” “if you comparing with anyone,” “the people who feels,” and “when you not compare.” Some sentences also lack a clear grammatical structure, such as “There are enjoyable life to have free time.” Practise forming complete clauses with accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and punctuate dependent clauses carefully. More reliable simple sentences would help before adding complex structures.

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