Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Describe the statement some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. But the others people believe tht we should try to cooperate more rather than competing against each others.

Overall, the school work is very important for everyone, because they help studies for every students and the students fouces on your studies so than the students competition at school works in daily life is a good things.

First of all, Some people believe that competition is good things the schools works because the students work competition id good and the students popular time on your works and the students complete this work and and the results or good things. For example one students complete on your school work in daliy life. And the try for the perblom to solve and the results is better in work on first time. The work is very important sucessful in life.

Secondly some people believe that you should try to cooperate more and competition each other the side is right. For example the students cooperate for each other and decided the work the cl;ass fellow so the helped the every students and the all students complete fouces on your studies and last the goods results the last performances than the the all students happy this results.

On my opinion, competition is very important because the all students fouces on your studies and the competition so than the all students fouces on your work and improve your skills and than the results is good difine the last month.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt to discuss both competition and cooperation, and your final paragraph gives a clear preference for competition, supported by the idea that it can help students focus and improve their skills. However, the discussion is very limited: the competition examples are difficult to follow, and the cooperation paragraph does not explain clearly how working together benefits people beyond completing schoolwork. The opening mainly repeats the prompt rather than establishing a developed response. The response also contains 234 words, below the required 250; 28 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Add at least 16 original words and use the extra space to explain and support each view with specific, relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “First of all” and “Secondly,” and a concluding opinion. These markers show an attempt to organise the response. However, ideas within paragraphs are not arranged clearly, and links between them are often difficult to follow. For example, the first body paragraph moves from students competing to completing work and then to “The work is very important sucessful in life” without explaining the connections. Repeated references to “the students” and unclear pronouns such as “your” also make it hard to identify who is doing what. Plan one main point per paragraph, then connect each example directly to that point and use clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on words such as “students,” “work,” “good,” and “results.” Some task-related terms are relevant, including “competition,” “cooperate,” and “improve your skills,” so the reader can identify the general topic. However, inaccurate word choices and spelling often strain understanding: “fouces,” “perblom,” and “daliy” obscure intended words, while phrases such as “the last performances” and “good difine” are unclear or unnatural. Build a small set of accurate expressions for discussing benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and collocations before submitting. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your examples rather than repeating general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use mostly simple sentence patterns and make some attempts to join ideas with “because,” “so,” and “and.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes distort meaning. For example, “the students fouces on your studies” has problems with subject–verb agreement and pronoun reference, while “the results is better” does not match the plural subject. The sentence beginning “For example the students cooperate for each other and decided the work” also has unclear tense and sentence structure. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are inconsistently controlled, as seen in “one students” and the capitalised “Some” after a comma. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause at a time.

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