Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is one group of people who says that competing with collegues, school-fellows and other people is good thing, while the second group encourages the idea of cooperation rather than competition. I will discuss opinions of both the groups, but I am of the opinion that cooperating with others has more positive impacts on minds of people and their growth than competing with other people.

Former group of people advocates competion to achieve the highest ranks in work place, studies or other aspects of life. For example, some parents prepare thier childern's mind in this way that they should compete with thier classmates and get good grades in their studies. This idea generates a sense of negativity in the childern's mind about their classmates. Although they get good marks and high distinctions in class but what obout their mental health? which is deprived of the essence of feeling good for the other people. These kind students, then do not get involve with other students easily. In addition, if they do not get remarkable grades, their mind prepares a sense of hatred hatred for those students. As a result, they can get depressed and stressed in their childhood.

On the other hand, there is a group of people who always encourage other people to cooperate with their classmates, collegues, or common people. This idea can develop a sense of humanity, becoming a productive person for the society and do good deeds for the community. For instance, if someone in cooperating with one's collegue, and he does not get promotion at the work place, but that colleague gets promoted on higher rank, the person will not have a jealousy in his mind rather he would be happy for his colleague. This type of behaviour generates a positive environment in the society and people live more more happy and healthy life in a positive environment.

In conclusion, I would say that cooperation benefits society in many ways. Although a person who competes with others, may achieve whatever he wants but, it only benefits himself or his family. While, on the other side of the picture, a whole community gets advantages by cooperation and having possitive attitude to the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a consistent opinion in favour of cooperation. The discussion of competition is relevant, using children’s grades and the possible effects on their wellbeing, while the workplace promotion example illustrates how cooperation can encourage people to feel pleased for a colleague. These examples help support your position. However, the case for competition is presented mainly through its negative effects, so the benefits supporters might see—such as motivation or higher performance—are not really explained. Some claims about competition leading to hatred or depression are also asserted rather than developed. To strengthen the response, explain the positive rationale for competition before evaluating its drawbacks, and develop each example with clearer reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your position. Signposting such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” makes the main stages easy to follow, and the ideas generally progress from examples to consequences. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. For instance, “Although they get good marks … but what about their mental health?” combines contrasting structures, and the shift from competition to its effects on children could be linked more explicitly. Repetition in “more more happy” and repeated references to “people” also weaken flow. Use cohesive devices more naturally and make the relationship between each claim and its supporting explanation explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “cooperation,” “competition,” “mental health,” “jealousy,” and “productive person.” These choices allow you to communicate the main ideas, and phrases such as “positive environment” show an attempt to express broader social effects. However, the range and control are uneven: several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, including “prepare their children’s mind,” “get involve,” and “a sense of negativity.” Spelling errors such as “collegues,” “competion,” “childern,” and “possitive” are noticeable, and repeated words reduce variety. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe parents as “encouraging their children to compete” rather than preparing their minds in a particular way.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “although,” “if,” and “while,” and your meaning is generally understandable. Some sentence patterns are controlled, such as the conditional example about a colleague receiving a promotion. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms recur. “Although they get good marks … but” uses two contrasting markers together; “which is deprived” is an unclear sentence fragment; and “if someone in cooperating” has an incorrect verb form. There are also issues with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “is good thing” and “a whole community gets advantages.” Review clause structure and verb forms, then proofread for articles and sentence boundaries to make complex sentences more reliable.

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