Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, a variety of people believe that it is necessary to have competition between workers or students, as well as in daily life. While another group of people wholeheardely with the opinion of collabration and that may lead to better improvements in people’s life and career.

From the first perspective that supports the point of view of competition, people are convinced this might assist workers or students to improve themselves or get into higher positions in their jobs and get promoted. For instance, at a company, this method of competition between employees can help them to improve their skills and to be motivated to reach a target; thus, this will lead to benefits for the company and workers at the same time. Another example in the scientific fields: researchers constantly compete to discover more about science and to publish new papers about their discoveries, which will help humanity or find new cures for rare diseases. Therefore, here the competition can help humanity and people to improve. But for sure, the competition is supposed to be fair without harming each other, in order to reach our purposes. Competition should be under clear murals rules.

On the other hand, which say that some opinions believe that we should cooperate more. This perspective leads to successful results due to its importance in making people more cooperative and helpful. If a group of people or students decide to put their effort and knowledge togather, or their resources, this will help them reach better results, as a variety of ideas and information people can share will introduce each one to new information and gain knowledge from each other. But as everything has its pros, it may have its cons as well, such as people not getting along togather or having different opinions can destroy their project; furthermore, wasting valuable time in arguments rather than getting an advantage of this time to actually work.

From both perspectives, I am neutral, as I myself have worked on many occasions on collective projects, and each time I get different results because this totally depends on the nature of the people who you are collaborating with. Working alone and having competition with my colleagues helped me to be more independent and search for methods that may improve my skills .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the discussion and include a personal view, supported by relevant examples. The competition paragraph explains how workplace rivalry may motivate employees and how scientific competition can contribute to discoveries; the cooperation paragraph also gives a clear benefit and a possible drawback. However, your conclusion says you are “neutral” without clearly resolving which approach you consider preferable, and the final personal example is not fully connected to that position. Some points, such as the risk of disagreement in group work, are mentioned but not developed with a specific illustration. To strengthen the response, state a more definite overall judgement and explain how competition and cooperation might be balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for competition and cooperation, and a concluding personal reflection. Signposting such as “For instance,” “On the other hand,” and “From both perspectives” helps readers follow the discussion. At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening “While another group…” is not a complete sentence, and “On the other hand, which say…” makes the transition difficult to follow. The final paragraph also shifts between neutrality, group projects, and working alone without clearly linking these ideas. Use complete topic sentences and make references explicit, so each paragraph develops one main point and the conclusion directly follows from the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “motivated,” “resources,” “discoveries,” and “valuable time,” and these choices generally communicate your ideas. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “reach a target” and “successful results,” though some combinations are not natural or precise. Spelling and word-choice errors—including “wholeheardely,” “collabration,” “togather,” and “murals rules”—are noticeable and sometimes distract the reader. Phrases such as “better improvements” are also redundant. Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases; more precise wording will make your arguments sound clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “as,” “which,” and “if,” and most of the main ideas remain understandable. Some grammatical errors occur, particularly in sentence construction and clause control. For example, “While another group of people…” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence, while “On the other hand, which say that…” lacks a clear grammatical subject and structure. In “a variety of ideas and information people can share will introduce each one,” the relationship between the ideas is difficult to follow. The final sentence also needs clearer punctuation and sentence boundaries. Practise building complete sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their connection is clear.

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