Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowday's everyone is competing by its own nature, some people argues that competition is a healty activity, whether it's at work, school or in our daily life it motivates us to remain constant . While , other group thinks that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Let's start with first group how believes that competition is healty which motivates us . While, the main reason behind this statement is that as we all know population of world increasing rapidly which cause lot of issues . For example , if someone applies for a job there aare huge number of resumes recieved so how they can sort , them to find a great fit canidate. While if they have some thing extraordinary in their resume , it can only achieved by competition like excellent grades, good experiences and hobbies.

On other hand, those who believes we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other because we belong to same genitics, eithnicity , or sometimes same race then why we should competing against each other? we are not robots we are human begins. Let's take example like robots, nowday's there is a huge competition in developing new tech robots every company makes more and more refined version just because of high competition but we need to notice one important factor robots dont have emotions but humans have.

In conclusion, i believe that cooperation is a key of success especially for growing nations like us. Firstly we need to learn how we help someone , instead of crossing there paths in term of competition . For some nations like China , competition is their key for development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and give a personal view: the job-application example explains how competition can encourage people to build strong qualifications, while the conclusion favours cooperation. However, the response only partially develops the task. The cooperation argument relies mainly on shared genetics, ethnicity or race, which does not clearly explain why cooperation is beneficial in work, school or daily life. The robot example also shifts toward competition between companies without making the comparison to human cooperation clear. Your position is present, but the final reference to China introduces a competing idea without explaining how it fits your view. Develop each argument with a clearer reason and a directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to arguments for competition, arguments for cooperation and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking expressions are repetitive or awkward. For example, “While” is used to begin several sentences where the relationship between ideas is not clear, and “On other hand” does not smoothly introduce the contrasting view. The job example is followed by a list of qualifications, but the connection to the main point could be made more explicitly. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s central claim, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence; use fewer, more accurate transitions and clearer references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “population,” “resumes,” and “development,” and you attempt phrases such as “key of success.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “remain constant,” “great fit canidate,” “same genitics,” and “crossing there paths.” Some expressions, such as “we are not robots we are human begins,” are understandable but informal and imprecise for an academic essay. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases, such as “encourage people to improve,” “work collaboratively,” and “qualified candidate,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if someone applies for a job,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For instance, “some people argues” has subject–verb disagreement, while “those who believes” repeats this problem. The question “why we should competing” has an incorrect verb form, and “population of world increasing rapidly which cause” lacks accurate articles and verb structure. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “we are not robots we are human begins.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete clauses, and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for punctuation.

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