Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in recent year, the compition is in every field because people want to sucess in their life and achieved higher position in the life such work, school and daily routine. while some people think that people ret to coopertare with oithers instead od completing against each oithers. i wil dicusee both views and given my openion in the upcoming paragraphs.

to begin with, some people believe that individuals want to try coopetae with oithers and also should assist to junior. specially how to handle the work and responsibilty in their field. additionally, people should keep good relation with all collegues. and support to each oithers in difficult situations such as personal and financial problems. therefore, cooperate in their work and school. also good communication and understanding also important role in everyones life.

furthermore, other people think that people should cooperate with other rather than completing with oithers. in this situtaion people try to adapt negavite habits and wrong situations in many times. moreover, proplr become a selfish for own concern and do not think about oithers. additionally, ignore scarifies and hard work. people should try to become sucess and chieve their higher position in the life. consequently, there are negative impact on repotion such as habits and bad communication with oithers.

in conclusion, from my prospective

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic and attempt to discuss cooperation and competition, but the two views are not clearly or accurately developed. The first body paragraph gives relevant points about helping junior colleagues and maintaining good relationships, yet it does not explain how cooperation benefits people at school or in daily life. The second paragraph is especially unclear: it begins by saying people should cooperate, then describes selfishness and concludes that people should seek success, so the view being discussed is difficult to follow. Your own opinion is not stated in the unfinished conclusion, “from my prospective.” The response also falls 34 words short of the required minimum. To improve, explain both sides distinctly, support each with a specific example, and state your position clearly in a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt at an overall essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “to begin with,” “furthermore” and “in conclusion.” However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because ideas are often listed without showing how they connect. For example, the second body paragraph shifts from cooperation to “negative habits,” selfishness and then achieving a higher position, without a clear link between these points. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, and the conclusion stops before completing the argument. Organise each paragraph around one clear view, use linking words only where they express a genuine relationship, and finish with a concise summary of your opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “responsibility,” “colleagues,” “communication,” “selfish” and “hard work,” which shows an attempt to discuss workplace and social relationships. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make several phrases difficult to understand, such as “compition,” “coopertare,” “ret to coopertare” and “negative impact on repotion.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “support to each others” and “achieved higher position in the life.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations as complete phrases, such as “compete with others,” “support one another” and “achieve a higher position.” This will make your ideas clearer and allow your vocabulary to serve the argument more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can identify the broad topic in much of the response. However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent. The opening sentence, “in recent year, the compition is in every field,” has problems with number, tense and sentence formation, while “people should keep good relation with all collegues. and support to each oithers” contains an incomplete sentence and faulty coordination. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “cooperate in their work and school” and “there are negative impact.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check agreement and articles, and practise joining related ideas with accurate conjunctions. More reliable sentence control is needed before attempting longer structures.

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