Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams represents the map of porth harbour previously in 2000 and currently.Overall major changes had been made in the plan overtime like location of the car park,marina,fishing boats had been changed and new showers and toilets, dock cafes and shops, hotel had been constructed also the publich beach has been converted into private beach.

The car park that was present on the narrow road extended from main road is moved to the right side of the main road and is connected by a small path.Above this car park showers and toilets are constructed.

The fishing boats area that was previously present next the old car park location is swaped with the marina present at the the east of already existing showers and toilets and small car park.

Another dock is built adjacent to the existing dock to maximise area for the passenger ferries.

Cafes and shops are built next on the west of the lifeboat area while a road is branched from the road leading to lifeboat to newly bulit hotel on the disused castle land present on the lower eastern corner of the harbour. By building hotle the public beach that was present with the castle is converted into private beach for hotel use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern of change, including the relocation of the marina and fishing boats, the addition of facilities, and the conversion of the southern beach for hotel use. The overview also recognises that the harbour has been substantially redeveloped. This covers the task well, and several details are relevant. However, some points are unclear or not fully accurate: the car park is described as moving to the right of the main road, whereas the plans show changes to the car parks’ positions around the harbour; and the new dock arrangement is better described as an additional jetty with two boats, rather than another dock built to maximise ferry space. You also omit that the north-eastern public beach remains. More precise comparisons and a clearer overview would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression: an opening overview is followed by paragraphs describing changes around the harbour and the hotel area. This makes the main points reasonably easy to locate. However, the body is not consistently organised by area or by type of change, and some sentences combine several developments, making relationships harder to follow. For example, the final sentence moves from cafés and shops to the road, hotel, castle and beach in one long sequence. Linking phrases such as “in the northern basin,” “by contrast,” and “in the south” could guide the reader through the map more clearly. Check references such as “this car park” and “the old car park location,” which are not always precise. A more deliberate paragraph structure would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “location,” “converted,” “adjacent,” “branched,” and “disused,” and these choices help describe changes and positions. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “lower eastern corner.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “maximise area for the passenger ferries” does not clearly describe the added jetty, and “swaped” is an incorrect spelling of “swapped.” Other spelling errors include “publich,” “bulit,” and “hotle.” Repetition of “built” and “present” also limits variety. Use precise terms for map features and changes, and proofread spelling; this would make the description more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning “while” and “that,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, some errors in sentence structure, agreement, tense and punctuation remain. The opening “The diagrams represents” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “Overall major changes had been made” uses an awkward tense for describing the plans. Several sentences lack spaces after full stops or commas, while the long final sentence joins multiple ideas without clear punctuation. There are also article and preposition problems, as in “next the old car park location.” Aim for shorter, controlled sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would make your complex descriptions clearer.

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