Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The above plan is of the harbour in 2000 and the changes which has done and how it looks today.

Overall, there are many changes happen in the harbour so many new things has added like hotel, cafes and shops, and many more.

The castle has replaced with the hotel and hotel is having private beach. The car parks and more showers and toilets has been added to the harbour. The more people are visiting the beach so the new things are added. The new dock has been added as there was one dock only now the new dock has added.

The next is the marina(private yachts) was on north side now it has replaced to the south side.. The fishing boat has been also replaced first it was on north side now it it on south side. The things have replaced there direction.

The modern amenities have been added to modernize the beach. The public beach is one the same place as it is open for all the peoples.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the harbour, such as the addition of the hotel, shops, and the relocation of the marina and fishing boats. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the main changes are identified, the report lacks a sophisticated comparison of the two time periods. The information is presented in a list-like fashion rather than a cohesive summary. To improve, focus on grouping related features (e.g., accommodation, transport, and leisure facilities) and ensure the overview highlights the most significant transformation, such as the shift from a functional fishing port to a modern tourist destination.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'The next is' and 'The things have replaced' are mechanical and do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where sentences feel like isolated observations rather than a flowing narrative. Improving the use of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' would significantly enhance the logical flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'added', 'replaced', and 'looks'. While these words are accurate in context, they do not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also some awkward phrasings, such as 'The things have replaced there direction', which is unclear. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'relocated', or 'expanded'. Avoid repeating the same sentence structures and vocabulary throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'changes happen', 'things has added', 'The castle has replaced'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are errors in word choice, such as 'peoples' instead of 'people'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and attempt to use more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing map changes accurately.

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