Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates data the figure of attendees of various activities at a particular social center in Australia, Melbourne city between the time 2000 and 2020 Overall, Table Tennis and Musical performances experienced an upward trend, while Amateur dramatics demonstrated a downward trend. Film club and Martial arts experienced a fluctuated, but were qual by the end of the period. Table tennis initiated with around 15 participants in 2000 and depicted a slight increase; in 2010 their attendees was 20, afterward it the figure of attendees surges, and by the end of the period attendees figure was around 50. Musical performance initiate their activity with 0 attendees in 2005 and increase and ended up with approximately 20 participants in 2020. In 2000 Amateur dramatics attendees was around 15 and fall to approximately 5 attendees . Film club and Martial arts both experienced a fluctuation, where film club initiate with around 65 attendees and ended up with the same figure along with Martial art also initiate with 35 participants and finished with same figure.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response is fundamentally flawed because it describes a line graph about social center activities instead of the provided task, which asks for a description of harbour plans. Consequently, the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt. While the student attempts to report trends and figures, these are based on a completely different data set. According to the IELTS descriptors, a response that is off-topic or does not address the task requirements cannot be awarded a passing score for Task Achievement. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and examine the visual data provided before beginning your writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into a single paragraph, which lacks logical structure. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'afterward', the lack of paragraphing and the disjointed nature of the sentences make the flow difficult to follow. The progression of ideas is hindered by the fact that the content does not relate to the task at hand. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—and ensure that cohesive devices are used to link related ideas logically rather than just listing data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is repetitive and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'qual' (likely meaning 'equal') and 'surges' used in a grammatically incorrect context. There is a limited range of vocabulary, and the word choices are often basic or misused. For example, 'initiated' is used repeatedly. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terms for describing trends, such as 'commenced', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. Focus on using words that accurately describe the visual information provided in the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'attendees was'), tense consistency (e.g., 'initiate' instead of 'initiated'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'afterward it the figure of attendees surges'). Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning unclear. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that tenses are used consistently throughout the report. Proofreading your work for these common errors before finishing is essential for achieving a higher score.
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