Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The maps illustrate the changes that took place in Porth Harbour between 2000 and today.

Overall, the most noticeable feature is the several new buildings and facilities were constructed, while some existing feature were replaced. As a result, the area became more developed and suitable for it's purpose.

At the beginning of the period castle was located in southeast, while public beach was situate in southeast. During the period, Dock remained underwent only minor changes. Furthermore, several new features were introduced, including showers, toilets and cafes shops.

In addition, turning to the remaining features, Marina was connected to Fishing boat by a new road. By the end of the period, the area had become considerably more accessible, and better organised than before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

Javobingiz 150 so'zdan iborat minimal talabga javob bermaydi, bu esa topshiriqni bajarish bahosiga sezilarli ta'sir qiladi. Garchi siz ba'zi asosiy xususiyatlarni aniqlagan bo'lsangiz ham, tasvir juda qisqa va o'zgarishlar haqida to'liq hisobot berish uchun zarur bo'lgan tafsilotlarga ega emas. Masalan, siz qasr va plyajni tilga olgansiz, ammo ularning transformatsiyasi yoki yangi qurilishlarning ko'lami haqida aniq ma'lumot bermagansiz. Yaxshilash uchun diagrammalarda ko'rsatilgan barcha asosiy o'zgarishlarni, masalan, marina kengayishi yoki maxsus inshootlarning qo'shilishini tasvirlab bering va fazoviy o'zgarishlar haqida to'liqroq umumiy ma'lumot bering.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

Insho xatboshilarga ajratilgan, bu esa o'quvchiga tuzilmani kuzatib borishga yordam beradi. Biroq, g'oyalarning rivojlanishi biroz mexanik ko'rinadi. Siz 'In addition' va 'Furthermore' kabi asosiy bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanasiz, ammo gaplar orasidagi bog'liqlik ba'zan uzilib qoladi. Havolalar ba'zan noaniq, masalan, 'Dock remained underwent only minor changes' iborasida bo'lgani kabi, bu grammatik jihatdan chalkash va mantiqiy izchillikni buzadi. Yaxshilash uchun bog'lovchi so'zlarning kengroq doirasidan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating va har bir gap oldingisidan mantiqiy kelib chiqishiga ishonch hosil qilib, ravonroq hikoya yarating.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Lug'at boyligi cheklangan va takrorlanuvchan. Siz 'features', 'changes' va 'buildings' kabi oddiy atamalarga tayanib qolgansiz. Shuningdek, 'cafes shops' (to'g'risi 'cafes' bo'lishi kerak) va 'situate' (to'g'risi 'situated' bo'lishi kerak) kabi so'z tanlashda ba'zi noaniqliklar mavjud. Yuqoriroq ball olish uchun xaritalar va shaharsozlikni tasvirlashga oid 'transformed', 'expanded', 'constructed' yoki 'renovated' kabi aniqroq lug'atni qo'llashingiz kerak. Tasviriy sifatdoshlar va otlar doirasini kengaytirish ma'lumotni yanada samarali va professional tarzda yetkazishga yordam beradi.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Matn davomida ravshanlikka ta'sir qiluvchi bir nechta grammatik xatolar mavjud. Masalan: 'several new buildings and facilities were constructed' ('that' so'zi tushib qolgan), 'some existing feature were replaced' (ko'plik shaklidagi xato) va 'it's purpose' (apostrofning noto'g'ri ishlatilishi). Gap tuzilishi nisbatan sodda va murakkab gap shakllari yetishmaydi. Yaxshilash uchun ega va kesimning moslashuvi, artikllardan to'g'ri foydalanish va egalik olmoshlarini to'g'ri qo'llashga e'tibor qarating. Nisbiy ergash gaplar yoki majhul nisbatdan (passive voice) to'g'ri foydalanish kabi murakkabroq gap tuzilmalarini mashq qilish ham ballingizni oshirishga yordam beradi.

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