Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
/Technology and education
Nowadays, technology has become an important part of education.many people believe that using computer, smartphones, and internet can make learning easier and more effective. I agree with this opinion because technology provides the students with many useful learning opportunities.
First of all, students can find information quickly through the internet. They can watch educational videos read online books, and attend classes for home. This is especially helpful for students who live far from good educational institutions. Moreover, online learning allows students to study at their own speed and repeat difficult lessons.
However, technology also has some disadvantages. Students may spend too much time on social media or playing games instead of studying. In addition, excessive use of electronic can reduce face to face communications. In conclusion, technology has both positive and negative effects on education. In my opinion, if students use it properly and wisely, it can improve their learning experience.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The student has completely failed to address the task. The prompt explicitly asks for a summary of two maps showing a harbour in 2000 and today. Instead, the student has written an essay about technology in education. This is a completely off-topic response. In IELTS Academic Task 1, candidates must describe visual data. Because the response does not address the prompt at all, it cannot be assessed for task achievement regarding the provided visual information. According to the official descriptors, a response that is completely unrelated to the task must receive the lowest possible score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Despite the response being off-topic, the internal structure of the essay is logical. The student uses clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In conclusion' are used effectively to guide the reader through the argument. The progression of ideas is clear, and each paragraph has a central theme. While the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the ability to organize a coherent text is evident, which allows for a higher score in this specific criterion than in Task Achievement.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Phrases such as 'learning opportunities', 'educational institutions', and 'face to face communications' are used correctly. There are some minor errors, such as 'excessive use of electronic' (should be 'electronics' or 'electronic devices'), but these do not impede communication. The vocabulary is generally appropriate for a discursive essay, though it lacks the sophisticated or less common lexical items required for higher band scores. The range is sufficient to convey the intended meaning clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There is a reasonable level of grammatical control, though some errors persist. For example, 'using computer, smartphones, and internet' lacks necessary articles or pluralization, and 'attend classes for home' should be 'from home'. Punctuation is generally accurate, although there are minor issues with missing commas in lists. The errors present do not cause difficulty for the reader, and the student demonstrates enough control to communicate complex ideas effectively. The grammatical range is sufficient for a mid-level band score.
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