Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram illustrates comparison of harbour between in 2000 and todays.
Overall, Nowdaysit become more modreated than in 2000. Car park, cafes s shop and hotel are main feathers are added to make more popular.
In 2000, the porth harbour are not more crowded such as it had just car park and bots fishing are located in southwest side while in southeast side consist of castle and public beach no private hotel is avaible at this time. it had just place of two ships .
Nowdays, fishing boats and marina (private yaches) are replaced each other place, one more car park build for parking that is connected with main road. new cafe s shop are intoduce for shopping, one main changed, in place of old castle (disused) introduce a new hotel and it was connected with road moreover provide a private beach for the hotel. At this time three ship stand are made for ships.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to describe the main changes between the two maps, noting the addition of the hotel, the new car park, and the swapping of locations for fishing boats and the marina. However, the response suffers from significant inaccuracies and vague descriptions, such as stating 'three ship stand are made for ships.' While an overview is attempted ('Nowdays it become more modreated...'), it lacks clarity and precision. Several key features are omitted or described very poorly, placing this response at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks logical progression and clear cohesion. Transitional devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'In 2000...', 'Nowdays...'). The referencing of locations is frequently confused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the various features on the maps. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak and repetitive, resulting in a Band 4.5 to 5.0 performance. Band 5.0 is awarded as there is some basic structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., 'car park', 'hotel', 'castle'). There are numerous word-formation and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'modreated', 'Nowdaysit', 'feathers' instead of 'features', 'yaches' instead of 'yachts', and 'intoduce'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for a higher band, frequently straining the reader's comprehension, which aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text, with frequent basic errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'the porth harbour are not more crowded', 'fishing boats and marina... are replaced each other place', 'one more car park build'). Simple sentence forms predominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently flawed. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.
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