Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plan show harbour in 2000 and how it look today.The comparison between harbour in 2000 and today. firstly, main road are link in the car parking.car park are link to main road and than went to the life boat. The pressure of water are also effect on the east side of the harbour in 2000. the passenger pass river through the boat and go to public beach. The fishing boats are also link the south side of a car parking. Firstly, rich family buy a private yacths and enjoy all side of a harbour, they are similar distance betwwen the dock and public beach. East side of harbour ships go easily and the public are fully enjoy our and went to the public beach. They are popular side of a perth harbour. Most of the family are also spent bought of time around south side of the harbour. They are most changesin the perth harbour in coming year.They are buid new hotel , cafe, shops. The main road are directly link between the car park and showers and toilets. The family came in enjoy and spent lot of time in boats and different activity in perth harbour. The family comre in perth harbour and enjoy fishing and visting the area through marina private yachts. They buy lays , coffee, eating things in shops . They make rest in hotel and go to the private beach for the hotel.The north side of the porth harbour are public beach. I see a lot of different in 2000 and now today.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to describe the changes to Porth Harbour between 2000 and today, mentioning elements such as the new hotel, cafes, shops, and the relocation of the marina and fishing boats. However, the response falls short of providing a fully coherent and accurate summary of the visual data. Key features are often misreported or confused, such as stating that 'rich family buy a private yachts and enjoy all side of a harbour' or misinterpreting the roads and beach areas. There is no clear overview presented, and several descriptions become irrelevant or speculative (e.g., 'They buy lays, coffee, eating things in shops'). Consequently, the response meets the length requirement but only partially satisfies the core task requirements, corresponding to a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from significant organizational flaws. While there are transitional words like 'firstly' and 'then', the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by confusing sentences and abrupt shifts in focus. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a lack of clear separation between the introduction, overview, and body details; a large block of text runs together awkwardly near the end. Referencing is often unclear, with pronouns like 'they' and 'it' lacking precise antecedents. Overall, the arrangement of information does not form a cohesive or easy-to-follow report, aligning with the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student relies on elementary words and struggles with correct collocations and word forms (e.g., writing 'buid' instead of built, 'yacths', 'comre', and 'lays' instead of snacks or items). There are numerous instances where awkward phrasing impedes comprehension, such as 'The pressure of water are also effect on the east side' and 'spent bought of time'. While some task-specific terms are attempted from the prompt, the lexical control is limited and errors frequently strain the reader, placing this response firmly in Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that are consistently faulty. Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The plan show', 'main road are link'), tense confusion ('how it look today'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with run-on sentences and missing spaces after full stops. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4.0 performance.
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