Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given figure illustrate,the harbour in 2000 and how it looks now .

Overall,it is clear that thr harbour has undergone significantly development in past there were public spaces and its has been a tourism spaces like beeches and hotel and now it is become tourism spot .

Therefore in harbour has develop more things now, now there is private beache for the hotel and significantly there is cafes and shops,lifeboat on the west there are showers and toilets fishings boats, car park beside of main road marina private yachts are there .Today they construct a hotel there and private beech .

Earlier it was constucted fishing boats instead of marina (private yachts) but ont the wast the car park and other things are still not change . In 2000 there was a castle and there is public beach beside it so now hotel takes place of castle now it become of private beach .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the changes shown in the two maps of Porth Harbour, mentioning several key alterations such as the addition of a hotel, private beach, and cafés, alongside the swapping of the marina and fishing boats. However, the task achievement is hindered by significant issues with clarity, task relevance, and factual precision. Sentences such as 'in past there were public spaces and its has been a tourism spaces' are vague, and some descriptions are confused or inaccurate regarding locations. The overview is poorly formed and lacks a clear summary of the most striking macro-changes. Consequently, the response fulfills the task only partially, aligning with the Band 5 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from a lack of clear organization and cohesive progression. The introduction is poorly punctuated, and the body of the text consists of a dense, run-on paragraph where ideas are lumped together without logical sequencing (e.g., 'Therefore in harbour has develop more things now, now there is private beache for the hotel and significantly there is cafes and shops...'). Paragraphing is entirely inadequate, as the entire response is essentially a single block of text or broken abruptly. Cohesive devices are either missing, inaccurate, or overused, making the overall progression hard to follow. This level of organization reflects the characteristics of Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and inaccurate collocations. Examples include 'significantly development' instead of significant development, 'tourism spaces' instead of tourist areas, and 'ont the wast' instead of on the west. While some topic-specific vocabulary is attempted (such as 'marina', 'fishing boats', and 'lifeboat'), the numerous lexical errors and awkward phrasing frequently strain the reader and obscure meaning, placing the response firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring very few error-free sentences. There are frequent basic errors in tense usage ('it has become', 'it is become', 'today they construct', 'earlier it was constucted'), subject-verb agreement, articles, and sentence structure (many run-on sentences joined improperly with commas). Complex structures are rare and generally faulty. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces misplaced around commas. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader, which corresponds to Band 4.

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