Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The give picture represent the camparison between two pictures of porth harbour in 2000 and today there are some changes like they added one more showers and toilets near second car parking after main road they also changes the places of marina private yachts and fishing boats.

On moving further first they added showers and toilets near both car park and they had changed the place of fishing boats with marina private yachs they give more space to marina and less to fishing boats they made more space with adding one more ships. The passenger ferries is as it is as past they had expanded the area of sea.

They had replace castle disused with hotel and the public beac now maded private beach for hotel on beside the road there is nothing in past 2000 but today the new cafes and shops are opened there the life boat is as it is as past

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of Porth Harbour, mentioning some of the key alterations such as the relocation of the marina and fishing boats, the addition of cafés and shops, and the conversion of the disused castle into a hotel. However, the summary lacks a clear overview and suffers from numerous inaccuracies in reporting spatial relationships and details. For example, the student claims that the passenger ferries remained exactly the same and that the area of the sea was expanded, neither of which is supported by the visual data. Furthermore, important comparisons are underdeveloped, and the overall structure lacks a formal academic report tone. This aligns best with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as two dense blocks of text without clear progression or logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, with phrases like 'On moving further' and 'as it is as past' used awkwardly to transition between ideas. Pronoun referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which part of the harbour is being discussed. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion to structure the response effectively. These features are characteristic of Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on copying terms directly from the prompt or visual data (e.g., 'showers and toilets', 'car parking', 'marina private yachts'). There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'give picture', 'camparison', 'maded', and 'life boat'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for a formal academic task, occasionally straining the reader's understanding. This performance corresponds to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting predominantly of run-on sentences joined by commas or lacking punctuation entirely. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, article omission, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The give picture represent', 'they had changed the place', 'the public beac now maded private beach'). Punctuation is virtually absent, with missing capital letters and full stops causing severe readability issues. These persistent errors significantly distort meaning and restrict the score to Band 4.0.

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